This is my first attempt at writing anything longer then 5 paragraphs. I'd appreciate it if you could point out any problems I made in writing it or any ideas for the story. Please, don't be rude about it and say that it is terrible, just say what I need to fix, thanks.
This is about a pony, nicknamed teal, who comes to Ponyville a few months after his nineteenth birthday, hoping to make some new friends and explore the new town. I'm pretty much making the story up as I go, if people actually enjoy the story I'll plan a bit more. By making it up as I go, I just mean I don't have a rough draft, I write it and fix the errors as I go. Planning would just make it a bit longer. I hope you will enjoy and I may change the title and/or chapter titles. No cover art as of yet.
One last thing, right now it is rated teen because it will a little bit more dark in the future chapters, may even turn mature. Just a little gore, Not happening, more like thinking of it. The ponies are human with the wings and horns and still all in Ponyville, just the appearance has changed. Also cutie marks are noticeable, either on pants or some other piece of clothing, and everyone knows what it is. Tags will change later on, when I get the darker chapters it will be added in the tags.