Ever wake up in morning and for a few short moments you can only remember bits and pieces of your self? Ha, well that of think but expand it to about your whole life, that is what my life is now... Sounds fun right? Ya i don't think so
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Hey your friendly neighborhood comment guy here back again for more critiquing and advice if I have any. First off I like that you are throwing in a unicorn that appears to be part of the tribe, makes you wonder why he was working with them. The same problem as before is prevalent however You are getting better at finding these mistakes and fixing them from what I see so good job on that. Just some advice for you though to help with this is re-read the chapter before posting I do this to make sure I don't miss anything. You still will miss things but the bigger mistakes are easy to catch and correct. Sorry for rambling again, please forgive me for that, but as always keep going and giving it your best so have a mustache.
6186805 Ya, i need to be reading over stuff more huh? Well the unicorn shall be explained and more over this is not the end of the Wild Buffalo tribe, they shall be back! . Regardless, feel free to ramble as much as you want, just wait for tomarrow
6186805 Oh PS, in the chapter i tried to clear up snowy's gender, i just noticed how i didn't explain it properly ever before. But for clarification it is female
6186826 thank you for not minding, it's something I've always had a problem with when I like talking about something. So I have to wait till tomorrow till I see more fallout story, ok I can deal with that. Anyway always nice chatting with ya
EDIT: yeah I was really confused on her gender. I guess you figured that out when I called her a he In a previous comment. I'm not sure whether or not to say sorry or not. Just in case however sorry
6186852 Ya, its fine the gender thing was mostly my fault. But ya! Talk to you next time i update!