50 Years before the events of Fallout Equestria, a monster falls in love with his victim and becomes best of friends with his hunter. Talk of a legendary Raider King brings pariahs from all over the wasteland to the town of Ponyville.
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What really interests me is how this fic is portrayed through the perspective of a wasteland merchant. I like the idea of having the 'protagonist' as a merchant, you lose income for being too 'kind' or charitable; or you lose customers due to you lack of empathy and take advantage of every trade to take as many caps as possible. Being a merchant in the wasteland is kind of in the 'grey' area, can't be too 'good' or 'bad'.
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It certainly creates an interesting game of economics. It is not that he can't be too generous, it just means that he has to balance who he cheats and who he gives gifts to. Sometimes a gift is an investment, because an act of kindness can give you a friend worth more than what you gave. Economics isn't always about making the money, but how it gets spread around.
Oh, oh this is quite good. More. More! MORE!
Great story like what I've read
6086098 Thank you so much. I really appreciate it! I hope you will like chapter 2 just as well!
Right from the first paragraph, the story starts with a question about subjectivity. The question might confuse a reader of Fallout: Equestria stories at first, but it actually provides a kind of frame to view the usual backstory blurb. Establishing a context to apply to the rest of the story at the very beginning is daring, but it succeeds in application to the first chapter. Well done!
One aspect that bothered me was the shift to including two different characters' dialogue within the same paragraph. By all means, you are free to do so, but it might be best to keep consistent. The dialogue with the robot is kept separate for both characters; then enters a new character, and their dialogue wind up answering each other in the same paragraph.
Witty narration is definitely the strongest quality about this story, so far. Every sentence seems to exist to play on words and create humor. It just becomes such a fun read that I take in every sentence and consider it for a moment. Not much aside from a Hemingway novel makes me do that. Fantastic!
Strange inconsistencies in formatting do appear, but they pale in comparison to the wonderful narration and witty dialogue. Although the majority of the chapter is a scene of two heads talking, the chapter maintains a good pace in introducing main characters and a catalyst for the coming adventure. I am intrigued, interested in seeing what this half-baked duo will do next.
Morse code checks out.