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Oh wow, I love this story so much.
Woo! That was an awesome chapter! Loved the ambush.
That escalated quickly.
I wonder where the grim reaper is? He loves crap like this.
(^ only thing I could find that could closely resemble the Grims type of music and is shorter than a minute)
Nice.
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Glad you like it so far! Admittedly, I need to err on the side of being really vague since that's just for the prologue. Suffice to say, it gets explained rather quickly what exactly happened there. It was a convenience for the sake of establishing a variety of things, not least of which is a snapshot of the type of battles that led to the world being the way it is in the present.
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I like that summation of Snap to that point - the trained, but inexperienced squad leader. That's exactly what I was going for.
The lengthy exposition... Yeah. Looking forward, I saw few enough times to really establish cloud seeding as a thing. It needed to happen that chapter, but it was placed in an already exposition-heavy segment.
That mention of Snap's thoughts in regards to his wife... yeah, I wasn't particularly trying to be that dark. If I ever did go over things again, that's probably an interaction I would tweak.
Glad you liked the drinking song! It's one of my favourites, ponified. The original, if you're interested: Jeremiah Weed
You picked an interesting place for the review, so I'm gonna have to stop there. "What is their mission," now there's a loaded question.
I'm also really, really late responding to these. Thanks for the comments! I love reading them!
Fascinating story I must say, I get the sense that Nose, Snap, and Tail had sort of 3 way love situation going on prior to this incident.
...and I thought the cyclic rate of a SMG was faster than that... 900-1000+ at least.
Another good chapter. We don't know too much about Crafter (other than that he's USELESS!!!) aside from the vague hint that something fucked up happened in his Stable. I thought it was nice to tie him alongside the other stable pony who died in chapter 3. She still feels like a plot device to me (mostly since we never get to know her enough to be invested in her demise), but it was nice.
I felt the series of scenes where the characters grief was too repetitive. Not bad mind you, just a tad annoying that we go through a scene having the characters grief over someone, and then transition it into them grieving for someone else. I'm guessing you guys wanted to get that stuff over with before advancing the story?
Tailwind showing her love of terminals and pipbucks brought a smile to my face.
Fade... He stole the fucking show for me. This Crazy Griffon Hobo brings a lot of energy in how he engages with the cast. His moment with Crafter when Fade sent him to fetch his landmine was gold! I also like the implication from Vanilla Rose that this isn't the first time our Crazy Griffon Hobo got himself shot due to appearing high on Dash. I've only known him for one chapter, but Crazy Griffon Hobo is my favorite character so far.