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The situation for our protagonist reminds me of Leon: The Professional; only the duo's circumstances are considerably worse than in that film. There is a lot of potential I can see for a plot like this, and the writing these past chapters have been excellent.
Sometimes it feels like the narration is repeating itself, though. The protagonist's cutie mark story is stated in the chapter before and stated again this chapter, only with more detail toward the memory. While I found the narration top notch and perfectly in tune with the setting, I noticed there were superfluous sentences such as the one I mentioned.
But I am thoroughly invested in this story. Well done!
Breathe
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You, my friend, have embarked on quite the journey. Godspeed!
I promise I caught some of those, lol!