Please Comment Your Opinion. This is my first story

Hello there.
So I'm the first to comment your story? Okay then...

First: there're no grammar-/spelling errors that burn out my eyes instantly, but I'm no native speaker, so...yeah, for that you should maybe wait for one to come by.

While I was reading your first chapters I didn't really get your OC's name, the color of his/her mane etc (but maybe that's just me) and I think the story progresses a little bit fast, exspecially at the start. You should elaborate your OC's background a bit.
I don't really know what your OC's stable's like, except that there's this bully and the mean overmare. My first chapter(s) were quite similar, except that I used more words with the same outcome.

Okay, all that sounded more destructive than intended...

On the plus side: (apart from the story itself, I don't jugde that.)
- the segmentation of your paragraphs cheer my eyes. I wish I would be able to do it like that.
- if the stable's not important for the whole story, than I'll be fine with the rushed introduction.

Don't be discouraged by comments of any kind, even if what I just told you sounds as if I didn't like your story. Keep writing.

4074207 There`s nothing wrong with constructive critism. Thank you for reading. I will explain the OC`s origin or background if you will. Her name is Wary. Thank you and if you want you can be a proofreader