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It could use some more spacing
3576758 where exactly I am just going by what I can do and that would be great to know
Even though you just introduced this Stitch character, I have a feeling I'm going to grow fond of him. The way he explained why he as a physician is inclined to fight was rather fitting. It may have seemed disturbing to some, but it was a rather practical and commonsensical approach all the same. Kill or be killed would certainly apply. I also found it amusing how Boom appeared horrified by his reasoning, but Slash was relatively indifferent. I can tell that the three of them are in for some interesting travels together.
It's intriguing how a city would be able to flourish and thrive in a nuclear post apocalyptic Equestria. I wouldn't have expected anything larger than a stable would be able to last very long. I suppose equines would just be able to adapt and get by much better than we humans would.
Oh, crap. How convenient yet unfortunate that that announcement from DJ Pon-3 popped up on the radio at the exact same time when Slashwing approached the firearms kiosk. So he saved Vinyl Scratch's life in a previous chapter? If so, I must have missed that. Or perhaps it happened sometime between two of the previous chapters. At any rate, it's interesting that she would remember him as both a pony who rescued her and a pony who's followed by a trail of destruction everywhere he goes. This will either be really good for Slash, or very bad.
On a side note, I like the idea of having Sweetie Belle as a singer on the radio. After all, she's a young filly with the voice of an angel. That's the kind of thing that could provide a beacon of hope in a time of despair. Sorry if that sounds overly sentimental, but I felt that should be said.
So, good work on this chapter. With regards to your style, I would advise indenting at the start of a new paragraph, and to give spoken dialogue their own sections. That could help the reader distinguish between the character's background and the current events of the story. Other than a few spelling and grammar errors, you're doing superbly so far.