• Published 16th Nov 2011
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Fallout Equestria: Broken Steel - Lex the Pikachu



Follow the Rogue Steel Ranger as she fights to find out what happened to her Stable

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i loved this story also i smell a sequel and a great way to end a story /) this is for you :moustache::moustache:

You just had to include that last part didn't you. But any way, an excellent ending for an excellent story.

Great story, loved it the whole way, and now a possible sequel, I can't wait :pinkiehappy:

loved it I give five stars :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

will there be more?

Do I smell a sequel? Please say yes there will be one. :yay:

What? End? Already? HERESY! :flutterrage: Haven't read Ch.20 because of me being lazy. I shall get to it after i stop being lazy :rainbowlaugh:

Please please please let there be a possibility of a sequel after finishing this.

3078033 The epilogue was entirely (apart from the end) spoken by Appletart and the clearing of the skies i did early on

With a name like Broken Steel, I was expecting the fic to be about after the end of Fallout Equestria with Littlepip coming back to fight the Enclave remnants.

3095770 Sorry to have disappointed you :duck:

Holy balls! I don't know why it never occured to me before, but I JUST realised something.

Before Motor Runner became Motor Runner (when his name was Scrap Heap), he had a chainsaw staff, right? Metal pole, chainsaw on each end?

That is totally a Dead Rising reference.

3078033 What I could see happening is some ponies coming up to Appletart and saying something along the lines of the "Krogoth is back." She replies with (paraphrased) 'lol, no. You're fucking crazy, go away.' Whoever the MC is decides that 'that bitch ain't gonna help,' and goes on his/her own to stop the K-02. Adventure(!) happens and at somepoint Appletart flies to aid a bit, either in the end or at least near it, either dies (because morbid) or just really injured, like loosing a wing. Or another leg.

At least that's what could happen.

3126419 The chainsaw staff reference in all honesty was actually a Gears of War 2 reference because the enemy called Scorge used one and Gears is famous for its chainsaw equipped assault rifles.

3127061 For your information I based K-01's RAILGUNS on the energy weapons of the Mammoth MKII from Tiberian Sun which fires a blue beam of death surrounded by a spiral of particals, they were called Railguns. If you also didn't notice the Zebras had dragons on their side so the AMRs would have been needed. I'd appreciate it if you two had your argument in IMs rather than on my fic

I liked it, what a beautiful ending. :twilightsmile:

3152277thank you very much, glad you enjoyed it

3337545 Enclave blow up their ship, heh, the ship that crashed was far larger than anything the Enclave had and the other ship is like a couple of miles long.

I had had this idea that the Kodiak 3, the one transporting all the remaining humans and tonnes of materials and weapons for the new world was already on Equestria, arrived several hundred years eariler, like 200 years before the war ever broke out but because of what it was and the danger it possessed it was hidden by having a mountain erected over it. In a way it could be seen like Big Mountain as the tech from the ship could have influenced the technological boom during the war. Keep in mind it was just an idea I had.

I'm sorry about my grammar, only got an E in my English GCSE.

3337828 Well if the ship was there the whole time; what about the 400 or so million people? I doubt the ponies could take on that many humans with spears and golden armour. (I mean who makes armour out of, like, the weakest metal out there? :rainbowlaugh:)

Although it would make a good explanation of how the ponies went from not knowing what a gun was, to having energy weapons in... oh I think it's about 40 years since canon Equestria that the bombs fell.

The grammar is at least legible, it's surprising how many stories I simply can't read because the grammar is piss poor. Compared to them this looks like it was written by an English teacher. :rainbowlaugh:

3338375 My favourite steam engines are the Princess Coronations, especially the Duchess of Sutherland, gigantic 4-6-2s, powerful and beautiful.

As for Braytain it's really up to your imagination

3338821 So that's the engine you based the one if your fic off of? Now I'm no longer thinking of an American streamliner from the 40s. Like this one:
streamlinermemories.info/Steam/Tennessean.jpg
(After playing Fallout 3 and seeing the metro trains I noticed how 'Fallout-y' this engine looked. :rainbowwild:)

3343921 The engine from "Cram Can" is based off the semi streamlined 4-6-2s of the British, Southern Railway's "West Country Class" and the locomotive bearing a shield emblem with the name "Blackmoor vale"

The west countries were affectionately called Spam Cans because of their slightly tapered semi-streamlined body.

http://www.panoramio.com/m/photo/3141769

Did you finish the story since the comment I replied to here said it was from chapter 25?

3343990 Oh yeah I remember reading about the 'Spam Cans' in a couple books I had. I just didn't make the connection when reading the chapter.


And no I didn't, but when you reply to a comment on the main story page while not reading a chapter it registers as the last chapter.

I haven't read the chapter titled 'Lost' yet, I've been doing other things and I'm a fairly slow reader as it is. :twilightsheepish:

3368200 Wouldn't be Fallout without head explosions

3399934 Have you EVER thought a Revear in Fallout 3? They are fucking impossible to kill. Fast as fuck and can kill you in like 2 hits.

Watching the show i've seen ponies use their tails to pick things up and use them to do stuff with.

3402630 I don't think I ever came across one in Fallout 3.

I've been replying the game so maybe I will.

But still, the alien weapons are like uber powerful, without an ammo that buffs damage. :rainbowlaugh:


Picking stuff up with a tail is hax. I call hax.

The ponies hax.

(In seriousness, it was probably put there as toon physics, which means to not be taken seriously, like most of the things Pinkie does.)

3421835 Revears and Overlords were added to Fallout 3 in the Broken Steel DLC. Sure This Machine is an alien weapon but it's a projectile weapon using pre-existing ammunition. Alien Blaster is an uber powerful energy weapon which scores a critical hit each time, This Machine does not.

3422435 Good point. While I have Broken Steel I never got around to playing it the first time because I somehow managed to save at the exact time an Enclave took a headshot at me. Every time I loaded the save I died, no matter how many buttons I mashed.

And I was too lazy to use my other save only like 20min before that save. :rainbowlaugh:

Then my old PS3 got the YLOD and now I have to redo the whole game. :rainbowderp:

3460639 about 40 or more, I'm not sure i never asked, also i hate heat so even if its like a normal temp, for me its just too hot.

Comment posted by anzalights00 deleted Nov 9th, 2013

3460758 40 degrees celsius? Holy cocks and bollocks! Dat's lame. Come to Finland! You just have to try a 100 degree sauna!

BTW, I'm pretty sure the human rifle was named The Machine in the beginning of the story or do I just remember wrong?

Cocks and bollocks, she says that phrase enough to get me to say that... Also this is painful to write on a 3.8" screen at 1.16 AM

Finanny, fucken awesome story!

~lights

3460758 40 degrees celsius? Holy cocks and bollocks! Dat's lame. Come to Finland! You just have to try a 100 degree sauna!

BTW, I'm pretty sure the human rifle was named The Machine in the beginning of the story or do I just remember wrong?

Cocks and bollocks, she says that phrase enough to get me to say that... Also this is painful to write on a 3.8" screen at 1.16 AM

Finanny, fucken awesome story!

~lights

3465844 Like i said i didn't ask the temperature.

Its always been This Machine.

I'm British and the useage of "Cock" and "Bollocks" in speech for things going wrong is common and i know what you mean as in TopGear, James May says "Cock" alot when he screws up and now i can't help but say it too.

I'm glad you are enjoying this.

Nice story. Good plot.
But seriously. You should find an editor/pre-reader who knows how to use the English language to iron out the few hundred errors in spelling and grammar throughout the whole story.
In all nice story, good plot and development, but structuring and some pretty basic English errors kept getting in the way.
Keep it up.

I just HAVE to point this out. I forget what chapter, but there was a point where you wrote that Appletart ran behind a sky bandit and "defecated" In the context it's obvious that you meant she threw up, HOWEVER defecate means to crap. So basically you wrote that she ran around the sky bandit to crap. I haven't laughed so hard in a very long time. Thank you.

3523831 I didn't use that word, I said she emptied her bowels. I never thought it would mean that but I'm glad you liked it and it was chapter 16 Deception

3524046 ah right, but still "emptied her bowels" is the same as "defecated". Not saying it's a bad thing, just a little mistake (but it still absolutely made my day, so thank you).

EDIT: misread your comment. Awesome story. Best line ever. Peace.....

MOAR EDITZ: Also, Who made that cover photo? It's great and I need a better one for my story.

3609823 Zooms into the post, wow I posted that 96 weeks ago. :derpyderp2:

Hey, if you're still searching for an editor, I might be interested

Well I must say I thoroughly enjoyed this fic going straight to my favorites. From the unexpected start to the surprising ending I loved every bit of it, though still can't believe zyon refused the cure. :derpytongue2: Look forward to another story

4009461 I'm glad you enjoyed it, thank you so much.

Zyon choose to remain female because she spent a large portion of her life female plus she carried and birthed her child. She'd be a stranger to her child if she changed back.

Currently I am working on FoE:BS - Under the Red Cloud and currently working on chapter six.

what happened to the filly rebuilding the train?

4101337 that is up to your imagination :3

I'm a Brit and may have some time to proof your story... when my home computer's working again. (No word yet on when that will be, but just thought I'd introduce myself.)

4461221 Thank you, its appreciated.

I loved this story.

4647504 i am happy to know you enjoyed it

yay, finally got around to finishing this story, no idea why i stopped reading it before

it was awesome! definitely one of the better FoE stories out there

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