Years before Littlepip stepped from Stable 2, the Wasteland greeted all ponies with it's usual contempt. Tome Tale and his silent partner, Stranger, live day to day on their next bag of caps, until they stumble into something bigger than themselves.
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Wooh boy, that feels Rollercoaster has left me emotionally whiplashed. At first I thought it was gonna be a simple smash and grab kinda of raid but then it all went tah shit. Especially with sonnets part. Add in lilly (liliac xD ) and the fun times keep rolling in. I honestly thought she would get to her cousin but in hindsight I realize it wouldn't have worked out for the plot line. I wish we could've kept her with but alas, twas not to be. And I really feel for lucky right now though. The stallion has it rough especially because of his luck being fouled by killing/posion joke. Never feeling safe enough to be close to others must be heartbreaking and lonely. Then adding this to his list of regrets... damn. Anyways, enough with the doom and the gloom. Thank you again for another entertaining chapter. It was really great. I have to agree with you about it being the best chapter so far. It's definetly my favorite thus far. Until next time Almanac, take it easy. ~mustangdrew4
8000548 Thanks for the positive review. ^^ it means a lot. any area's you feel could be improved upon?
8000561 Imma be honest with you, I can't think of anything to improve upon your current writings. The grammar was excellent, I haven't found any spelling errors, the plot line is running smoothly, the characterization is believable and seems to come from the expiriences the characters are going through, and the pacing seems to doing pretty well. If I really wanted to be nitpicky about it, maybe work on adding more descriptions about where they're at setting wise. That's all I can really think of.
Great chapter as always Almanac.
This one though hit me right in the feels.
"They had lights inside their eyes..."
I see what you did there.
~ Chapter: 13
8001436 hehehehehehe. glad someone noticed.
Well.....Now another fallout story that I'm in love with but is also not finished! I would have been leaving reviews for each of your chapters. But I couldn't stop reading them! First got hooked with your audio version from when you posted it on the fallout book design Facebook page. Have been a fan since. Now the issue is trhat I need more! Lots more!!!!! If you need another editor I'd be willing to help. I did notice a few errors in each chapter. Nothing serious but noticeable none the less. Also it was either this chapter or last chapter where you had the same paragraph twice. It was regarding lucky and sonnet. I want to say It was after the radioactive ghoul fell on her and messed her up good. Also damn you! Poor Lilly! Although I shouldn't be surprised because this is a fallout story. Nothing good happens to characters you like. I'll come back in a day or So and get you a better review. But I want more chapters, if you can that is.
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Thank you so much. Don't worry, this is far from dead. I sadly have to do commissioned stories so have a scheduled order in what I work on, and sadly, I can't always write the things I want to write. I am, thankfully, doing one last book before I do THREE FULL CHAPTERS OF THIS!!!!!!! So you'll get your dose. Just gotta finish this one. Lol. And after those chapters, I plan to record, Chapter 3 in audio for YouTube as well. ^^ Thanks for the compliments, I'm so glad you like my story!!!!
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Just so you know, I'm now working on the next chapters. Gonna be bringing out three of them one after another. ^-^ (Just give me time to write the damn thing. lol)
jeez. 54% of the way through(according to kindle) and dang. when was the last time i had wiplash this bad?
the main character really does make my opinion of him swing side to side so fast, even from the beginning....then again he calls himself an asshole so i guess i should stop expecting morally good stuff. all in all, i like it. he's not a paragon of virtue, but he's also not as much an ass as he says. he's...dare i say normal. flawed. something people often forget when writing characters. its hard to like him as a character, but thats because he's developed realistically, rather than as someone to admire. (and i love how he says "because Stranger told me to, and in this fucked up world, he's the closest thing i have to a conscience any more". that 1 quote can be taken so many ways and really shows how harsh the wasteland is, the damage it can do.)
still curious where this thing with sonnet is going, along with her.....gift?
and Lucky, its been hinted the luck is only good for himself, but i wonder if it has limits and how those limits act.
overall, its a well written fallout themed story. darker and less likable than normal stories due to being more realistic to how people would act in a wasteland. (Can't say how many times now i've been frustrated when Tome refuses to stop slavers. each time it takes me a while to remember that....its sorta the norm there. theres enough problems without you becoming like buckshot and trying to stop slavery. even though i want to...)
can't w8 to read where the story goes. its just so much better with a character that fits the fallout theme, rather than a maverick whose trying to change/improve the world(we got a dime a dozen of those stories. and not many that just fit in naturally. the only other one i can think of is Nevermore from False Dawn. "His is a story not of fighting corruption in himself, but of redemption that can never be found. A heart which is cold, becoming warm again, and a pony such as him, learning what it means to be alive." matches her).
edit: chapter 6 done......wow. while i suspected who he was....that.....just......killing joke really is scary....and would make an even scarier lawyer with how vague the requirements for their joke can be(vague...or devilishly ironic)
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Chapter 6 is my favourite chapter. ^^ Oh, chapter 7 is the weakest chapter, I'm sorry for it. Lol. I am well aware its a far off beat compared to chapter 6 and the tone chapter 6 left you with. But I hope chapter 8 makes you feel better about it. I am well aware it's been over a year since I updated, but I actually almost have the new chapter finished, it'll be out in the coming week or so. :) I'm glad you're enjoying it. ^-^
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chapter 8.....wow that went places o.o (continuity with the beginning <3 )
also, DAMN killing joke is cruel. said it before but.....daaaaaamn.
can't w8 for whats next.
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I'm glad you enjoyed it. ^^ Thanks for the comments, they're good motivation.