A young colt has aspirations of heroism, but swiftly learns that such a dream may not be realistic within the confines of the Marejave Wasteland. Can he overcome the world's callousness, or will he fall prey to it like so many before him?
7958834 Thank you so much I admit, it's been disheartening at times, but I've also put too much time and effort into this to stop now. Encouraging comments like this do make it feel a lot more worthwhile.
Wow... So clicking on this chapter did I first think that there were something wrong with my computer, but by changing a few of my story settings can I see that the letters in this chapters apparently have been coded to be black, which is a shame since I normally read with night mode and the default very dark blue background. I would have thought that it was on my end, but when I try to do the "green on black" setting does the letters not change, so there are properly some code voodoo going on behind the scenes.
Its weird to think that 4 chapters in are we already with the halfwaypoint... of what there are written that is. I know that I sound like a broken record... but chapter length! The chapters are amazing as is, so I can see why you wouldn't want to edit them in any way or form, but cutting them up where there are natural breaks would hopefully convince people that is as foolish as I was before I got hooked to give the story the change that it deserve, because looking at your story stats (and wow 9 downvotes in the first month alone... yea ignore those fuckers!) can you see a bad downwards curve that show that a lot of peeps click on the first, even the second chapter as well, but then suddenly drop the story for whatever weird reason they have.
So there is this weird case of catch 22, that the more that I like a story, the less I comment on it, since I just want to read and read without distractions. So unless something big and major come up should you not expect me to say as much as I have lately. I see no need to praise what have already been praised or point out returning things that have been pointed out before.
Nitpicks: " The words tasted vile as they passed tongue" missing a my "I picked myself up off the floor as I spat an orange-tinted bile" delete " The multitude of broken bones made him look like a crippled bird desperately trying take flight." feels like it is missing a to "nd the cracking of distant of rifles indicated sniper positions somewhere out in the surrounding desert. " delete
I like it. Keep going. :D
7927770 Thank you, I'm glad you're enjoying it.
7958834 Thank you so much I admit, it's been disheartening at times, but I've also put too much time and effort into this to stop now. Encouraging comments like this do make it feel a lot more worthwhile.
Wow... So clicking on this chapter did I first think that there were something wrong with my computer, but by changing a few of my story settings can I see that the letters in this chapters apparently have been coded to be black, which is a shame since I normally read with night mode and the default very dark blue background. I would have thought that it was on my end, but when I try to do the "green on black" setting does the letters not change, so there are properly some code voodoo going on behind the scenes.
Its weird to think that 4 chapters in are we already with the halfwaypoint... of what there are written that is. I know that I sound like a broken record... but chapter length! The chapters are amazing as is, so I can see why you wouldn't want to edit them in any way or form, but cutting them up where there are natural breaks would hopefully convince people that is as foolish as I was before I got hooked to give the story the change that it deserve, because looking at your story stats (and wow 9 downvotes in the first month alone... yea ignore those fuckers!) can you see a bad downwards curve that show that a lot of peeps click on the first, even the second chapter as well, but then suddenly drop the story for whatever weird reason they have.
So there is this weird case of catch 22, that the more that I like a story, the less I comment on it, since I just want to read and read without distractions. So unless something big and major come up should you not expect me to say as much as I have lately. I see no need to praise what have already been praised or point out returning things that have been pointed out before.
Nitpicks:
" The words tasted vile as they passed tongue" missing a my
"I picked myself up off the floor as I spat an orange-tinted bile" delete
" The multitude of broken bones made him look like a crippled bird desperately trying take flight." feels like it is missing a to
"nd the cracking of distant of rifles indicated sniper positions somewhere out in the surrounding desert. " delete