Some Rewriting on "Foreigner"

Folks who:

Read chapter 4 of Foreigner the day I posted it should know that, following a lovely suggestion from OneOverTwo, I added a couple paragraphs to the scene where Applejack bucks the debris away to reveal the bit of the mosaic underneath. They're dealing with rocks, after all, and with Pinkie sitting right there, it was downright unnatural that AJ didn't consult with the rock farmer's daughter about the proper spot to kick. So now she does.

Mike

Comments

[PresentPerfect]

I'm waitin' till the whole thing's done before getting into it. :B GIT TO ER

[AugieDog]

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Ah. Well, then:

Don't read this blog post 'cause it might give away a plot point...

Still, I'm thinking chapter 5 on Oct. 2nd and finishing it with chapter 6 on Oct. 16th. Unless it needs an epilogue. And I'm hoping that it doesn't...

Mike