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Sep
11th
2014

Human - How it would've ended · 11:15pm Sep 11th, 2014

So, since it's cancelled now (and I seriously do not have any plans to revisit it), I think it's time to get into how this story was going to end before it got the ending it did.

Be warned, most of this is dumb as all hell.

We'll start with a rough story direction:

The next chapter would've included Soft Spoken telling the story of how he lived through the last few centuries, including his theorising about the exact point he became a vampire in the original timeline, but since he was living through history, he couldn't change anything and doesn't know anything for sure, other than that he suspects his cousin never really died. Meanwhile, Celestia and Jekyll would've talked down Second and convinced him that to kill either Jekyll or Hyde would in fact change his own fundamental self, either killing all the good or all the evil in him. To that end, they both encourage him to kill Hyde instead, but since Hyde is where Second gets his power from, he does not, and instead simply reabsorbs them both and tells Celestia to get out of Canterlot and get the story back on track. This is important set-up for later. This chapter also would've finally given a name to Second's godlike power, as Hyde would've revealed that Howard has been mentally referring to it as "the Lordforce" most of this time, referencing the Odinforce from Marvel comics.

Celestia would return to the mountain, and by the time she got back, Spike would have summoned the remaining dragons there as well, as part of a plan being formulated by the rest of the group. We here would've gotten the rest of the backstory on Spike, learning that he became the Eternal because the main six used the Elements of Harmony on him instead of Tirac, using them to power him up to his current form, since a demon king is immune to almost everything except dragonfire. Tirac's physical aspect was destroyed, and his soul banished back to Tartarus.

"So... you defeated the demon king with friendship?"

"Well, no. I defeated the demon king by burning him alive and tearing his head off. But in a sense, yeah, I guess friendship allowed me to do that."

After this, the group would've split up to find allies to assist in the retaking of Canterlot. Luna, Sliske, Mystic, Explodey and Broad Sword leave for the changeling hive in the Prometheus. Blueblood and Tome leave for Zebrica on dragon-back. Celestia and another dragon go to Atlantis. Spike flies off to the Crystal Empire. And Chains, Softy and Gold Coin head back to Ponyville to save everyone from the zombies.

This would've led into a two chapter arc with the perspectives split between Luna's group dealing with the changelings and Softy's group fighting off the zombies in Ponyville. On Softy's side, we would've seen his and Gold Coin's reunion with the rest of the modern Apple family, and they would've gotten everyone out with the dragon and evacuated the survivors of Ponyville to Manehattan. The main focus, however, would've been the pay-off to all those references to a changeling civil war. The Prometheus would've been shot at over the Badlands and forced to land in the battlefield between both sides. Sliske and Mystic are captured by the rebels, while the royalists loyal to Chrysalis take the rest of them. Given that she obviously has her own problems, Chrysalis only agrees to spare changelings to help retake Canterlot if either the ponies end this centuries-old civil war for her this very day, or else Luna agrees to go on a date with her, which she's been trying to get her to agree to for several centuries now. Luna then reveals, to the shock of everyone, that she is straight. Chrysalis is so flabbergasted by this revelation that she has no words, and the group are forced to head off to the rebel stronghold to rescue their friends and end the civil war. They arrive to find that Sliske already killed all the rebel leaders and possessed the last one to make him declare their unconditional surrender. In Manehattan, Chain Mail locates a remaining contingent of the Royal Guard, who he takes command of as well. As the second of the two chapters end, the group reunites near Canterlot, now commanding a joint army of Royal Guard ponies, crystal ponies, zebras, changelings, Atlanteans, and dragons, as well as the Prometheus. From his place atop Canterlot Castle, Second notices the approaching army. With a wave of his hands and a short speech, he declares that by his power as an MLP writer, every Mary Sue alicorn OC ever conceived is now canon, and thousands of alicorns rain from the sky. Just for good measure, he also gives his side an accurate recreation of every ship in the US Navy, except that the ships can all fly.

The next two chapters cover the battle.

Despite Second's phenomenally unfair advantage, the united forces are able to use the armoury from the Prometheus to arm their side with enough guns and explosives (which nobody knows how to use, but they improvise) to kill the alicorns effectively. Second notices this, and so places a giant magical shield around the palace to also protect himself. In the skies over Canterlot, the Prometheus drops pegasus strike teams onto the flying ships, and our main heroes go with one of these teams to hijack an aircraft carrier and crash it into the shield, destroying a good portion of the palace in doing so, but also getting inside. Explodey here comes face to face with Nuclear Anomaly, and the two of them have an extremely destructive battle across the palace as they both attempt to blow each other up and absorb the other. Ancient Tome meanwhile, also along for the ride this time, has a confrontation with Thug Lyfe, who he battles with while trying to snap him out of Second's brainwashing. The rest of the Elements try to find Second, but unbeknownst to them, Second has already left the palace and is now battling Celestia and Luna above the city as they try to stop his nukes dropping. In the midst of this chaos, Sun Rise boards the Prometheus again, this being the first time we've seen him since he was almost killed at the mountain.

Over the final chapter, Tome is forced to kill Thug Lyfe, whose original personality, Ze!zar, reemerges for a moment before his death to apologise. Explodey defeats Nuclear Anomaly, knocking him out but not killing him, and leaves him in some ruined corner of the palace. Anomaly wakes a short while later to find the TARDIS waiting for him. Second is also seemingly defeated, falling from the sky to somewhere unknown, but he slips away and heads to the Prometheus to meet with Sun Rise, who has already seized control. At the top of the palace, our heroes finally use the Elements of Harmony for the first time. As their power washes over Canterlot and the rest of Equestria, the infected living are cured and come to their senses, the risen dead regain their original personalities like Celestia did instead of being mindless monsters, and the princess herself is seemingly restored to normal. The remaining alicorns on Second's side are almost all killed. Despite this victory, Second and Sun Rise have taken the Prometheus, and they fly away with it towards Secopolis, Second contacting the city by radio and instructing them to activate Project Beacon. As they fly away, the Elements strike the ship too, but since they weren't the primary targets and the part that reaches them is just the zombie healing wave passing over the rest of Equestria, it doesn't do anything to Second other than remove his own zombie infection. He is annoyed by this, until he discovers that the Elements also cured his catastrophic erectile dysfunction, which he is overjoyed by.

After the celebration in Canterlot, the dragons rest, and the princesses, Tome and the Elements head for Secopolis to find Second. When they get there, they find the Prometheus moored to the top of the cathedral and another shield stopping them from getting to it. Tome leaves to find the unicorns powering it to help get them inside, coming across Sun Rise while doing so, and a battles ensues. Meanwhile we find out that Project Beacon was a method of calling the Doctor to Secopolis. Just outside the city, Second walks up to the TARDIS as the Doctor and Ditzy exit. He then shoots the Doctor with his shotgun, causing him to regenerate into Eleven, and runs inside the TARDIS to steal control of it. He shouldn't be able to do this, but since Second was the one who canonised the Doctor Whooves meme during his time as a writer, he is able to exert control anyway. Second now has easy time travel, and he goes to retrieve Silver and takes them up to the Prometheus. Meanwhile, Sun Rise is seemingly defeated, the shields go down, and everyone else makes their way up onto the Prometheus too, except the princesses, who come across Ditzy and the newly regenerated Doctor and learn what just happened. Up on the Prometheus, the Elements battle Second head-on, resulting in him and Silver fleeing in the TARDIS and the ship exploding and crashing down into the city, necessitating that Spike saves them.

The next two chapters after this heavily focus on Second as he zips around the timeline and ties up loose ends. He travels to Canterlot and rescues Nuclear Anomaly after Explodey defeated him. Next, they go to Tartarus in the recent past, and Second challenges Tirac for leadership of the demon legion. He wins by threatening Tirac with a bottle of his own urine, which since he is a god, counts as holy water, which can harm Tirac without his physical aspect. Once in control, Second sends Tirac himself off to the underground facility in Secopolis, instructing him to seal himself inside Project Pandora. He sends off another demon called Chernobog to possess Sun Rise and forge him into the pony that he will need later on. Then he sends Qramstarflokrinhir to assault the Prometheus after the Brotherhood of Man hijacked it, with orders to recapture Ze!zar from the ship and move him into a holding cell underneath Canterlot, where Second would later find him to turn him into Thug Lyfe. The secondary mission of the raid is to install some magical thing that will allow Sun Rise to later single-handedly take control of the ship during the second battle for Canterlot. Qramstarflokrinhir is also tasked to give Second's past self specific nightmares that inspired parts of Second's plans and led him here.

In the present, Tirac emerges as Project Pandora activates, now having regained his physical aspect thanks to the project. He and Spike fight, which ends with both of them badly injured. The Eleventh Doctor rigs a cheap vortex manipulator and leaves to find and steal the TARDIS of his past self during Celestia's funeral, intending to go save Gallifrey, because he knows what's coming. This is because the destruction of Gallifrey and the subsequent unleashing of the universe-eating monster was the work of Second, Silver and Nuclear Anomaly, who landed on Gallifrey and started stealing as many TARDISes as they could before they blew up the sun and let the monster out. Many of the other scenes we've seen involving time lords has been Nuclear Anomaly killing more of them for Second because they didn't get enough TARDISes from Gallifrey and were stealing more from the survivors. Once they're done, Silver takes all the stolen TARDISes and lands them on the moon in preparation for the plan. Eleven meanwhile takes his TARDIS back to his past self, which happened during the first invasion of Canterlot sometime. Finally, in the present and back in Secopolis, Second uses the dimensional-traveling capabilities of the TARDIS to rip open a hole in time and space leading back to his original universe. The chapter ends with millions of humans being pulled through into Equestria.

"Attention, humanity! Welcome to Equestria. The year is zero, as we're just entering a new era of human dominance, topside temperature is unknown but will likely skyrocket in the next few hours as all Hell breaks loose, and the pony population is somewhere between six billion and extinct depending on what we decide to make of it. You will find accomodation has been provided for you in the American capital of Secopolis, and refreshments will be available. Please enjoy your stay, and for the bronies among you all, please do not fuck any horses while you are here. You don't know where they've been. This is your lord and master, the Second, signing off."

Down in Secopolis, as the humans arrive and our heroes are left panicking, the Pantheon shows up in person at long last. These aren't the real Pantheon who were actually behind everything, but rather avatars, just like Nathan used. Nevertheless, they are presented as being the real guys. We learn from Second, as he arrives, that this is because the meta element of the story was meant to conclude with him defeating the Pantheon here, bringing them into Equestria via the TARDIS. Since this is part of the story, he has to act it out and pretend like they're the real guys. They dramatically reveal that they have First and he is under their control but Second is easily able to break their control, and he casually rips out Johnson B. Garrick's spine, his mastery of the Lordforce being much greater than theirs, and Tirac helps finish off the rest of them. First and Second have their big dramatic reunion, only for Celestia, Luna and the Elements to confront the both of them, furious at all the destruction they've caused. At that exact moment, the universe-eating abomination appears in the skies over Equestria, and Second identifies the entity as being something akin to the embodiment of Dramatic Convenience itself, the creature whom the Lordforce is drawn from, and the closest thing to a truly omnipotent being that exists in this universe as far as he knows. And he plans to kill it.

The following chapter would've detailed the final execution of Second's plan, which he has been formulating for most of the story so far. As he had canonised the Doctor Whooves meme, he assumed that the TARDISes of this universe operated the same as in Doctor Who. And in Doctor Who, a single TARDIS exploding in the right way can effectively end the whole universe. Second's plan, therefore, was to create a time-proof shield around Equestria's planet, and then detonate over a hundred thousand TARDISes at once outside the shield, and hope that it would be strong enough to essentially kill God. So that's what they do. Celestia and Luna move the sun and moon into an eclipse to power up Tirac. Tirac uses his ultra-strong demon powers to shield the planet. The Elements use their power to support Tirac. And Second and First fly the hundred thousand TARDISes as close to the entity's centre as they can, before blowing them all up and destroying the whole universe outside of the shield, killing the entity.

When the dust settles, the universe collapses and is reborn outside, Equestria is host to the last remaining life in the cosmos, and Second and First return, somehow still alive even after all that. Of course, nobody is particularly happy to see them, given that Second just comitted the biggest act of genocide ever, but they're all at least glad that the space god is dead. While the ponies all try to get their bearings and the confused humans from Earth try to make sense of what the fuck just happened, Second disappears for a little while and First goes to return the last remaining TARDIS to its original owner, the Doctor. Celestia comes with him, and the three of them converse about the possibility of returning all the humans home, only to learn that their stunt earlier caused the walls of the universe to become too fragile, and that attempting to push all the way through the dimensional barriers would cause it to collapse a second time, destroying Equestria, which is now the last refuge of life in the universe.

A little later, Second returns while they're all together inside of the TARDIS, arriving under the pretense that he needs to speak with his son, who is unable to look at him. Celestia allows this, only for Second to knock Anthony unconscious with a pipe wrench, saying that he couldn't have him trying to stop him now. It is here that we learn that Second removed Jekyll from himself earlier to allow him to do this, because the plan since the beginning was to get home. Killing trillions of innocents was just a stepping stone to that.

"Your universe will die if I try to go home. Dramatic Convenience would have ensured that you would defeat me and prevent my leaving if I tried. So I pulled the living embodiment of Dramatic Convenience itself into this world and killed the shit out of it, so I'd have an unobstructed path back home."

"You mean you did all this, killed all those ponies, set up all these plans, and took on an omnipotent being just to get back home?"

"What can I say? I'm dedicated to my goals."

"Dedication is one thing. The lengths you've gone to for this are pure insanity!"

"Insanity? Princess, I don't know if you've ever been married, but I made a promise! I swore on all that I held dear! 'Until death do us part'! And I'm not dead yet! I don't care what I have to do to get back home! If this universe has to die for me to see my wife again, then fuck this universe! These subhuman scum should be honoured to give their lives for such a thing!"

Second would've then kicked Celestia and the Doctor out of the TARDIS, stolen control and flown away. What little empathy he still has left compels him to pick up Silver as well, and then he makes a run for the dimensional barrier. Celestia runs to her sister and the Elements, letting them know what happened, and they all climb on Spike's back as he flies them into space to chase Second down.

The final chapter would've been the last fight between Second and the ten heroes, which would've been on an asteroid hurtling through the time void on its way to the dimensional barrier, which Second had to make a crash landing on after their attacks. Long story short, without DC to restrict him, he is a very difficult fight, as every time they attack him with something different, he makes himself completely immune to that form of attack immediately afterwards, so they have to constantly think of new ways to hurt him every passing minute. Eventually, they blind him with a really bright light, and while he's disoriented, the protagonists power up the Elements again, except that they use them on Spike, just like before, causing the final strike to take the form of magically-enhanced dragonfire, which Second had not yet made himself immune to. Second is still blind as it's coming towards him, but Silver sees the incoming attack.

At this point, the story splits into ten alternate endings, the outcomes determined by what Silver does. Her options are:
>Scream a warning to him.
>Run over to him and jump in front of the blast.
>Run over to him and knock him out the way of the blast.
>Run over to him and pull him back into the TARDIS.
>Run for the console and use time travel to fix this.
>Save herself and run away.
>Die with him.
>Pray for divine intervention.
>Shoot him.
>Masturbate furiously.

There are three joke endings. Running away results in Silver arriving back in Equestria with Second dead, only for an interdimensional alien empire to break through the barrier despite everyone's efforts and kill everyone unceremoniously, rather like how the actual ending I wrote unceremoniously killed everyone. Praying for divine intervention would've caused a caricature of myself, the great DannyJ, to rescue Second. It would've ended with Second dying anyway because I don't like him. And the "masturbate furiously" option would've led into a scene of a publisher staring down at a manuscript incredulously, revealing that the whole story was some cocaine-inspired work of an aspiring pony author that was just now handing it in for review by his publisher. The publisher is unable to comprehend what he is reading and asks why Silver suddenly started masturbating, only for the author to reveal that all 400K+ words of Human were actually just the prologue and first chapter for his real magnum opus, a pornographic novel fifty times as long entirely about Silver. The author is then arrested.

The "serious" endings meanwhile all result in various combinations of the characters living or dying. Two endings feature the heroes dying and Second returning to Earth. In one of them, Silver is dead, and Second crashes several centuries in the future, discovering that America has since been taken over by a cyborg tyrant, and he resolves to use his powers to stop him. In the other, Silver is alive, and he crash lands in the present, allowing him to reunite with his wife. In both cases, Anthony is with him. Another ending would've had Silver killed and the heroes averting the destruction of Equestria, but Second is flung into the time void and left adrift, unable to get home. Yet another ending would've had Second and Silver kill the heroes, only to get trapped in another pony universe that's even worse than theirs. An eighth ending would've had Silver and Second both die, but the heroes would've failed to save their universe and fallen through into the human world. And there's one ending in which everybody lives, but the TARDIS forcibly transforms Second into an alicorn, which is a major power decrease for him and allows him to be safely captured and imprisoned.

But, of course, the canon ending is nowhere near that merciful, and that's the one where Silver fails to save Second and he is burned alive by rainbow-coloured fire, just like in his nightmare. His power is stripped away, his soul is binded to his form so that he cannot escape as a ghost like First did, and his skeletal form is able stagger forward for just enough time to convince the Elements that they failed, only for him to give them one last middle finger and finally crumble into dust. They take the TARDIS back to Equestria and save their world, but are unable to save Silver, who is left in the time void crying over the dust pile. Because I'm evil like that. We end the story with the remaining characters musing on all the pointless destruction and wondering what the moral of it all was, or if there even was a moral. They eventually conclude that there probably wasn't one, and that life is a whole lot of stupid shit that doesn't make sense, but that stupid shit will keep happening so we might as well deal with it.

And that's it. That's the ending.

Subplots and unanswered questions:

As well as the main plot, there were a lot of side things going on as well, so I might as well explain some of those.

Mystic and Tome's story was intended to end with their eventual reconciliation, which would've happened around the time the group returned to Secopolis. Sliske's attempts to manage Mystic's mental trauma would've finally failed during a brief moment of absence, and Tome would've had a moment to be there for him and act like a father for once, admitting all his mistakes and apologising for them. Tome never stops being a dick, but Mystic is at least unafraid of him for the rest of the story. In an earlier draft, Tome would've died shortly after, but then I remembered that I'd made some of the book quotes at the beginning of the chapters be from books written in the future after this whole incident was over, which I'd accredited to Tome, so he had to survive. I'm an idiot.

Luna was going to have a character arc in the later chapters revolving around Celestia's concerns over how she responded after she died. The conclusion we would've reached is that Luna in this fic leans too heavily on her sister to cope with the constant death that an immortal being witnesses, such that she was not able to cope anymore once she didn't have Celestia around. This is a problem that Celestia never shared, having already spent a thousand years on her own, but Luna never hardened the same way. This arc would've resolved with Luna deciding to live for herself and to not solely rely on others, as she couldn't expect others to always be there.

Second's two remaining hallucinations, Ambition and Creativity, would've made brief reappearances to resolve their subplot. Creativity would've shown up again in Canterlot after Celestia left, possibly in one of the changeling chapters, and Second would've killed him. Ambition would've appeared to Second upon the return to Secopolis, taunting him about the Pantheon's power and how his plan could do nothing to stop them, and he would've also been used to hint at First's imminent return. He would've also been killed, and in a very brutal fashion.

Explodey and Broad Sword's romance would've been only occasionally touched upon for the rest of the story's run, as for the most part, almost everything happens over the course of just a few days and it's all pretty hectic. Suffice to say, the story was never going to end with them getting married on something like that. They'd have just stuck together more closely for the remaining chapters and some minor character development would've resulted. Broad Sword would've got a more expanded backstory, but that's mostly it. Something similar would've happened for Gold Coin and Easy Eight, except that Easy's few reappearances would've been used to foreshadow things like the arrival of the humans or the battle against the space god.

The backstory of Second would've continued to get more expansion. We were already mostly done with learning about his youth and how he raised Anthony, so subsequent flashbacks to his life would've focused on his early relationship with Carol, how they got married, how they had Anthony, and their lives in general. Most important about these flashbacks, and what most recontextualises a lot of Second's actions in the story, is that it would've been revealed in some of the very final chapters that Carol was pregnant again with a second child around the time Howard and Anthony disappeared to Equestria. What's more, they hadn't told Anthony yet at the time. Anthony died not knowing that he had a little brother on the way. Howard did know, and had to live with that for a thousand years.

Finally, there are four big issues that are still left unresolved by the end of the story, and those are the identity of Mister Mxyzptlk, the circumstances of how Softy became a vampire and what happened to Van Helsing, what happened to Sun Rise, Tirac and Jekyll, and how the arrival of the stranded humans will affect the balance of power in Equestria. All of these threads would've been left for the sequel to follow up on, but that's a whole different story, and to spoil the plans I had for Secopolis would also involve spoiling elements of the two side-stories, neither of which are cancelled, so I won't do that.

But speaking of side stories:

There were plans made for several other side stories that never got released, which I guess I get to tell you about now.

Gods and Monsters, by Spellbound Star was a planned in-universe field guide to the various deities and magical creatures of my version of Equestria, as written by the great grandfather of Ancient Tome, who was mentioned by Spike in chapter five. The book would've been used to explain more about how alicorns in this world work, as well as the vampires, and of course there'd be mentions of humans and sakrassi and demons and other such things. This book would've also attempted to lay out their relative power levels, showing how strong each are in comparison to the other using a scale of magic I invented, which I might still use for some future projects. The story would've also been presented as a first draft of the book, full of notes from Spellbound Star and his editor. A lot of the comedy in this story would've came from these notes, as Spellbound is a very obvious Brotherhood of Man cultist and keeps making passive-aggressive remarks about the princesses or trailing off into some irrelevant political rant, and his editor would have to keep yanking him back and telling him no.

Sorrow of Second was a planned side-story focusing on a group called the Seven Sorrows, who are meant to be the most elite assassins in all of Equestria. The story's premise is that a Canterlot noble, upset by Second's actions, hires them to kill him. The fact that Second is a god means that they obviously have a little trouble accomodating this request, but they have some code about never turning down a contract, and their own stupid honour forces them to waste time and resources attempting to kill an immortal. Each chapter would've had a different member of the order going after Second in a different way, attacking him during some of the moments we weren't with him during Human, only for him to kill the assassin effortlessly and think nothing of it.

Not All Treasure is Silver and Gold was a side-story about Silver that was going to take place after Second left her in charge of Secopolis in chapter twenty-seven. It would've been about her trying to keep the various factions in line and preventing everything from exploding, literally in one case, as a nuke nearly goes off in the city before she is able to stop it. This was originally planned to be a CYOA story, but that shit's hard to do, so it was changed to a more standard format later on. Still never got around to writing it, though.

Finally, The Long Road Home was a story based on the alternate ending in which Silver died and Second was left adrift, and would've been about him going from universe to universe and trying to make his way home the long way, hence the title. I never released it, despite being done with the first chapter, because I realised how hard it would be to do without spoiling massive amounts of the plot. I could only keep the references so vague for so long. That and I realised that Second in the story came off as a massive Sue if the reader was unfamiliar with Human and didn't know just how complex a character he actually was, and new readers who hadn't read Human were a very real possibility.

Q&A:

Since that's everything that I can think of, I'll conclude the blog here. Now you know how the story ends, so you at least won't be left forever wondering about what was going to happen. I'm sure that I might have missed things, though, so if there was a question you had that I left unanswered, or you want me to explain something that didn't make sense to you, or you just had general questions about the story, then leave a comment, and I'll answer as best I can.

Also, click here to read about how its sequels would've gone.

Other than that, thank you to all of you. It's been an experience.

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Comments ( 57 )

The publisher is unable to comprehend what he is reading and asks why Silver suddenly started masturbating, only for the author to reveal that all 400K+ words of Human were actually just the prologue and first chapter for his real magnum opus, a pornographic novel fifty times as long entirely about Silver. The author is then arrested.

Jesus fuck dude, forget everything I said, I want to see this happen.

But seriously though, this is just unbridled insanity. I can see what you meant by that it was dumb as all hell, but there were some nuggets of gold in there. And what was with the Siver hate, I mean, yeah she was working for Second, but she wasnt evil from what I saw, not at all

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I don't hate Silver at all. What gave you that impression?

i didnt know you could make the story make even less sense than it already does but you somehow managed it
congratulations

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The whole condemning her to weep over the ashes of the man she devoted her life to in the hopes that he may return her affections, while she remains trapped in a timeless void, forced to spend what ever time she may have left, in pain and agony, which is assuming that she could die. Which would be a mercy compared to spending eternity in said timeless void, left to go mad as her own devices ravages her sanity like some fucked up bird of Hermes, with her love for Second being the sun that stripped her of her wings.

MOTHER OF FUCK! I HATE YOU AND LOVE YOU AT THE SAME TIME FOR THIS STORY AND I WISH I COULD TIE YOU UP AND THROW YOU IN AN ASYLUM SO THAT YOU'D BE SO BORED THAT YOU'D FINISH THE STORY FOR ME. FUCK!

Funny, I just wrote a story for school yesterday on what I did over summer break. It involved me defeating an alien armada, and killing the captain by harnessing the power of love to punch him in half.

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What a lovely image. Very graphic. You're quite the poet.

But that isn't, in fact, Silver's final fate. Although I didn't mention it in the blog post due to the fact that I never really talked about Secopolis, she does return for the sequel. The original plan for Secopolis would've been that the reader would go into it not knowing which of endings was canon. Silver's presence, among other things, would've implied that the alicorn ending was the canon one, but it would've eventually been revealed that Second is in fact dead and that Silver found a way to escape the time void on her own. She would've been a pretty major character, too.

Why would you make me read all these? Now I want this to be written.

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I seriously love you, though. :fluttershysad:

But...but...but...that sounds like the greatest story ever, it would have been completely insane, but it would have been the greatest story ever...

In the other, Silver is alive, and he crash lands in the present, allowing him to reunite with his wife. In both cases, Anthony is with him.

Silver alive and living a peaceful life on earth with both humans. Best characters safe and happy, to hell with everybody else.
BEST END 10/10.
Slice of life/comedy/romance spin-off featuring Silver on Earth when?

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Slice of life/comedy/romance spin-off featuring Silver on Earth when?

romance

featuring Silver

...Not that I actually have any plans to write this, but how would that work? Dude's wife is right there. He's back with her. Silver has lost.

Any chance you could just dump The Long Road Home into a blog post instead of leaving it lying around somewhere in the dark web?

Dude's wife is right there. He's back with her. Silver has lost.

I didn't say she should had an affair with Second however nice it could be, Anthony on the other hand, same genetics and children eventually come to reflect the personality and qualities of his or her parents.

Holy Commodore. this blog post containing the mere outline o the rest of the story is longer than many completes Ive read. :pinkiecrazy:

Still, better you quit while you are still able to dribble away from your airtube, and give vague and disturbing implications of what was possible.

Very Lovecraft. Have a F'tagn butty. :twilightoops:

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I have a habit of throwing out what I don't need when I clean house, and I clean often, because the shit in my place piles up real high real fast. I'm not entirely sure I even have it anymore.

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I think expecting Anthony to grow into something resembling Second is rather pessimistic.

They eventually conclude that there probably wasn't one, and that life is a whole lot of stupid shit that doesn't make sense, but that stupid shit will keep happening so we might as well deal with it

This is probably the greatest moral ever.

I'm really disappointed you didn't keep writing this, but the summary ending was better than nothing so thanks for that at least.

So now I know what I'm missing. I am very thankful that you're doing this though. I hardly ever see authors do this when they cancel stories.

Also, I know that dozens have said this by now, but Human was very entertaining even if it was objectively bad in some areas. It's the story that got me to realize that reading could be fun, and I'll never forget it.

I'm looking forward to what you'll write next.

Well, that was an experience. Thank you. Even if you think it was bad, I really enjoyed this fanfic, if only for its covulated meta plot.

Damn, I really wish you WOULD finish the story as you planned it out. Poor Silver though. I really feel bad for her and want to hug her so much .I really liked these characters. Explodie especially. I'm glad you posted this at least so I know how it WOULD have ended. It was silly, overblown, hype as shit and a real fun ride to read and I'm really especially sorry it won't be finished. :fluttercry:

Alright. I laughed throughout a good chunk of this. I guess it'll do. Still, poor Silver. My personal explanation for why she had feelings for Second was that the Pantheon was planning on implementing a half-assed romance sub-plot between them. It would've been funny if when Nathan took over writing the book, he dropped the romance sub-plot altogether and because of that, Silver started to question her feelings for Second and straight up turned out to completely dislike him.

I wonder how long the final word count would have been? It might have been somewhere around 600k words at least! Maybe in another life we'll get to read the whole thing...

I say that you make one more chapter where it is revealed that one of the people who represented the pantheon is on their deathbed and they were the one telling this story. Everyone there is getting bored with the story and so this blog post is him hurrying up the story before he dies and then he tells them it's all true as he breathes his last breath. They're all shocked and wonder if he was telling the truth and if so what happened to everyone afterwards. And that would be the lead in to Secopolis.

Well what I was wondering is - what would happen with the original Elements? Would their ghosts be finally laid to rest?

A real shame this got canceled -just your abridged version, all those outcomes, everything, is just so damn convoluted and crazy that it would indeed be the best thing ever - nobody would know what the fuck is going on anymore, but nobody would care and would happily succumb to more insanity of this story.

Still, thank you very much for the ride, it's been awesome from the very beginning :twilightsmile:

Human was the story that got me into using Fimfiction to track pony fics instead of the hot mess that is EQD. :ajsmug:

i must say, I fell behind on updates around chapter 17 and..........i was completely lost while reading the first 8 or so paragraphs of this blog post lol.

I always loved your world-building with the Meta/4th Wall powers. The politician parodies had me DYING. But fuck was it lonnnnnnnng. I eventually got worn out.

That last joke ending tho, BAHAHAHA :rainbowlaugh:

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My personal explanation for why she had feelings for Second was that the Pantheon was planning on implementing a half-assed romance sub-plot between them. It would've been funny if when Nathan took over writing the book, he dropped the romance sub-plot altogether

This is now my headcanon.

No, wait. This is now canon. So say I.

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The original Elements died when the Pantheon blew up the afterlife. Their souls were reincarnated, but we wouldn't have seen this confirmed during the course of Human, as their reincarnations would've only just been born. Nor would we have seen this for certain during Secopolis, as it takes place only six months after the end of Human. However, the second sequel, Reich, is set several decades into the future, and would've had a brief cameo or two by ponies with familiar cutie marks, implying their identities as the reincarnations of the main six.

Man, this stuff is brilliant. I get why you didn't want to continue it, but damn, it seems like such a waste.

+1 for "masturbate furiously" as an alternate ending. :pinkiecrazy:

There were plans made for several other side stories that never got released, which I guess I get to tell you about now.

I still want to write something based on the scene at the bar from chapter 14, where all the background characters (Remus and Easy Eight and friends) have one-liners about their epic backstories.

But, y'know, that would like require time and shit. Not to mention I'm already slacking off on my existing multi-chapter story. :trixieshiftleft:

Question: how the spinoff about the Third fit in all this?

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Unfortunately, to tell you the ultimate purpose of Shades in the context of Human would require spoiling Shades, and I would rather I didn't do that. Needless to say, if Draven ever gets back to regularly writing it again, how Hayato fits into the story should become clear in the later chapters of Shades.

The real ending is time stopping due the story's cancellation :pinkiecrazy:

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There weren't really any others, besides Van Helsing.

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It wouldn't have been impossible to do once Human was over. The story would've ended with an epilogue that shows the lead-in to Secopolis, so people would know the general shape of the landscape. And Secopolis, as the name suggests, never really deals with events outside the city much. I've seen people make sidefics with less.

But while Human was still being written, yeah, making a sidefic would've been impossible for an outside author because of everything always changing. I even had a little box on my userpage stating exactly that, just because I got so many people approaching me to ask permission to do so.

Before I start the letter, I do have questions for you.

1. There were some villains you mentioned as being in the original show (I don't remember all the names - I want to say Atlantis was one?) as season-enders. Did you plan on bringing them in to the story? I don't think they all came in.

2. Was I correct in my immediate suspicion that Shades of Grey was, from a meta perspective, a movie made some time after the show ended (early 2020s)? I knew it took place after Tirek, several years in fact, so that would have checked out logically.

3. This may have been answered in the story, and I apologize if that is so, but I really didn't read the afterlife stuff very in-depth. I couldn't make myself do it. Did First's afterlife always incorporate Hell, or did that only come into existence later, as the "string pullers" corrupted him?

4. Was Future Imperfect (the meta Human) created via some sort of whole brain emulation and computer simulation technology? This is one I wondered about extensively, since it would be likely possible with 2030s technology, and would account for the fact that all characters are sentient and can interact with their creators, something which normally doesn't happen. In this scenario, Second and First would have been forcibly uploaded and their memory erased, while Nathan is an "operator" that jumps in and out of the simulation. The main cast had fleshed-out personalities and were fully sentient. Background characters, on the other hand, were just non-sentient "illusions" (in addition to saving computer power, it means that the simulation operators didn't have to suffer from the moral repercussions of having billions of innocent ponies suffering until set free by the cast). I don't remember this ever being mentioned, but I might have missed it.

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DannyJ,

I'm kind of pissed off at you, but I do respect your decision on this. It was beginning to weird out/terrify even me near the end (I only skimmed through much of the afterlife arc because I really couldn't take the depressing-ness anymore).

So: My personal story.

I started following the story early on. I think it was in early 2013 I found it, which wasn't near the beginning per se, but close enough. I remember waiting months for updates, and checking daily to see if it was on. I remember wanting to say how much I loved your story, but not feeling worthy of a response from my hero. I remember making you that song, even though it was pure "modern art" with feeling and no talent, just because I wanted to show my love for your story somehow. You wrote a masterpiece, and honest-to-God, I think the only way to have avoided what you did was to COMPLETELY REWRITE THE WHOLE STORY to increase the sanity-factor many times over. Even though such a thing would earn you a full biography in every English literature textbook written from that point on, I doubt you were up to this task.

My main issue with the story is that I thought it never found the nice middle-ground between reality and insanity it should have. I felt like it would have worked best as a mixture of action and comedy at the same time. As it really happened, I felt like you kept them fairly separated. There was that horrifyingly depressing afterlife bit, which in my opinion dropped the story from a 10 to a 9.5... and the rest of the story wasn't anything near that. It never tried to take itself seriously until that moment. I think it would have been better if you mixed it together more. I thought the story had a ton of potential for drama and character development that was never realized because of the insanity, which was amazing at first, but kind of wore out after awhile.

With that said, is it now okay to write fanfics of the fanfic? I know about your policy, and now it's over, but I'm unsure as to whether "cancelled" means "the entire brand name is now laid to rest, it's all over" or just "Fuck this, I don't want to write anymore, do what you want with it." I had a couple headcanons throughout the story that never came into fruition, but since that'd take a while to type it, I'd like to get a yes/no as to whether you are for/against allowing that, not to mention a yes/no as to whether I'm even a good enough writer.

As for Shades of Grey... well, I'd offer to do it myself if Draven can't (you mentioned he is busy in real life), but I'm hardly up to the task, considering the only things I can write well are battle rap verses and pseudo-philosophic papers that I send to people on Steam and hoard obsessively in Google Drive, and I don't know what your plans are anyway. I'm not saying I'm a shitty writer, just that anything on the Human brand name deserves the best of the best - and something like that, which you personally oversaw, absolutely demands it. In any case, I don't know if you even have control over the decision of who writes that, or whether or not it gets written, since if I remember correctly, most of it was done independently by Draven with your oversight.

(In the last post you said "stay tuned," but I didn't see anything about it in this, so I'm assuming it's still undecided?)

Whatever happens, man, thanks for the story. I've been working on a "fan rap" (if you want an idea of my rap skills: http://www.letsbeef.com/tournament_battle_details.php?id=1547&section=tb I'm the lower box) for you about the story in text form, because I really felt the song I made for you just wasn't enough. I ought to have it finished by the end of the month. And, when I'm old and have all free-time, Imma hopefully learn Flash and turn your book into a movie, because it totally deserves it.

Love you Danny. Like they say, I hate the sin, but not the sinner :) Time to check out some of your other work, I guess - and then I probably will be, quite honestly, your biggest fan. And, if I ever run in to you on the street, first one's on me. I mean the first Pepsi, though, you have to be 21 to even walk into a liquor store here... sigh. It's been fun, man. (Oh, by the way, is it true that British people don't drink iced tea, but drink some other sort of tea instead? I'm from the Southern US, same as First, and that's all we drink.) You, along with the guy who wrote Finishing the Fight (I know him in real life and we play card games together every now and then, good times) inspired me to start writing myself (though I eventually took more to rap, spoken-word, and intellectual ranting than fiction), and for that, I thank you. If you ever wanna play StarCraft with me (if you don't have it, it's actually a free download now to play just the community-made custom games, which are honestly way better than the actual game anyway), I would be honored, but I doubt you are willing to waste your time with a mere fan.

Oh, did I mention that you made this blog post literally within a half hour of my birth-aversary? Can't say birthday here, because it was more accurate than that. Dayum. Discovering this is like a late birthday celebration for me. Maybe we are tied together on some sort of subconscious level (if you happen to be thinking about pizza as you read this, consider that confirmed).

Anyway, brother, thanks for all the fun times we've had together (even if you didn't know me until like a couple months before it all ended). I couldn't have made a better farewell myself. Always 100 brother, always 100.

Thank you, and to all a good night!

-Dat OMNI

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Hey again! Wow, that's a lot of questions. Let's get started. *Knuckle crack*

1. Atlantis and the Nameless One were intended to get more exploration in Shades, when their defeats were more recent, much like how Shades explored the Spider Legion at the time when they were still in conflict with Equestria, though not necessarily in the same way. In Human, the Atlanteans were going to be part of the second battle for Canterlot, and we would've had a few minor scenes set in their city before we got to that. The most important thing we learn about modern Atlantis versus how it was back then is that it is now a constituency of Equestria in a similar way to the Crystal Empire, ruled by none other than Princess Neptune, Shining and Cadance's daughter from Shades.

2. I can't really speak for that right now, because it would be spoiling. I will however reveal that it is set before Tirac's escape. Notice how Spike in that story is still relatively normal sized. The Eclipse Crisis is still to come.

3. As was revealed by the ending of one of the chapters, the afterlife was created by Anthony because he wrote a fanfic about ponies having a Heaven and a Hell, likely ones similar to those of Inferno, and his father likely read it and incorporated into canon somehow. This is why First had powers despite not having worked on the show: because he did influence it through Howard, even if it was something as small as Howard taking it as headcanon. So in short, yes, Hell was always there. Although it probably wasn't as much of a nightmare before First was corrupted and started throwing anyone in there.

4. An interesting theory, and if I'd heard it earlier in the story's run, I might have adopted that idea. But no, that isn't the case. Rather, Human operates on the (perhaps unrealistic) theory held by some that everything exists in some universe somewhere, and thus that some universes will perfectly mirror some works of fiction. As we would've eventually learned in the story, Nathan and the Pantheon never really had any sort of control, and we've just been looking at a universe that coincidentally mirrors Future Imperfect as imagined by Nathan in Howard's home universe. All the constructs created by Nathan and the Pantheon and the fantastic reality-warping powers on display are mostly just natural phenomena of being in that universe, stemming from the entity that Second's plan was leading up to killing.

5. Of course you may write stuff based on this. I never intended to make a sandbox this fun to play in and then hog all the toys for myself. Though, Shades remains in Draven's hands and he intends to finish it, and subsequently, the universe is not dead yet. I may also be releasing my intended plans for Secopolis minus the Shades spoilers sometime soon, so you might also want to wait around to see that.

6. I have personally never touched an iced tea, and that's because I have hot tea available right here. Teabag in a cup, sugar, hot water, milk, and stir. Perfect for mornings, afternoons and nights, and voted number one best substance in history by everyone ever. Get on my level, pleb.

Hope that answers everything! Hit me back if there was anything else you wanted to know.

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My apologies for 2 and 3. My memory was playing tricks on me, I guess - thought I remembered Eclipse being mentioned in Shades. I'll also add I believe Many-Worlds is a load of it (Lubos Motl permanently changed my opinion on that), but hey, your story. I also believe Second mentioned it as a possibility, but it was never confirmed in-story, was it? Thank you for the answers. I'll be rereading most of it shortly, and if I have any new thoughts or questions, I'll let you know.

Okay Danny, I knew there was something I was forgetting to mention, and after starting to re-read the story, I found what it was almost instantly.

So after I read that it was still okay to write side-things, and the playground didn't disappear with you (and we can still come over to your house and have fun, yay!), I immediately started thinking of things I could write as side-fics. Thanks to my neckbeard-insomnia (Mountain Dew = best writing fuel for people who won't touch meth) while I was working on the "Human rap" (more like Human-inspired six-syllable-schemed slam poetry), I managed to construct two ideas in my head. One involved a split timeline after Celestia's death, leading into an alternative-universe Human, which is much less trippy and gives the story a more rational ending. I didn't come up with every detail, perfectly, just a few general ideas that could give Human the more serious, non-LSD inspired treatment I thought it needed, plus a few headcanon-theories I developed during the run which you've said aren't the case. I might try it later, but since that would be a huge-ass project, I'd rather get practice with something simpler before trying it. The other is the reason why I'm asking this question, and I'm surprised you didn't mention intending to write a side-fic about it.

Basically, I'd like to know about Two of a Kind, which, unless my memory is fucking up again, was the meta-name for the episode featuring First and Second. First contact, how/when they appeared, more about what they did, yadda yadda yadda. Some of that was flashbacked and lightly touched upon, but I don't think it got really fleshed out, and I think it's just begging for me to write the episode up in fanfic form. To that end, can you inform me further about that? Detailed answer if ya' could, please - I'm guessing you thought about it to some extent, and I'd rather not just asspull more than I have to.

I think Human: Two of a Kind would be a helluva way to start writing, and something that needs to be written by someone. Thanks.

(Sorry about having to end things with "if I remember correctly," "I think," etc. Even with a good memory like mine, it's hard to recall everything from a fic that's nearly 430,000 words long, even if I read most of it in detail. Oh, one more thing. The Elements run on DC, right? As in, they have no predefined power level - they are just powerful enough to do whatever they need to.)

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I'll answer the second question first: No, the Elements of Harmony do not run on DC, or Lordforce, or whatever you want to call it.

In this setting, alicorns were godly beings that existed since the beginning of time, and who (along with the primordial forces, like Discord), shaped the universe. Celestia and Luna in this world are two of the many severely weakened descendants of some of those original creator gods. Also among that old alicorn pantheon were beings like Mortality, who ran the afterlife until she was killed by First, and Rassilon, the first of the time lords. Many of these gods are actually still around during the present time of Human, only dormant or ruling other alien worlds, but Second's plan and the battle with the Entity ends up killing most of them offscreen.

The Elements of Harmony in this world were forged by the ancient Spider Legion and made with the souls of six powerful alicorns who volunteered to be the power source. This is because Equestria's planet was incredibly dangerous and full of scary shit, even by the standards of a universe in which abominations like the Nameless One and the Time Worm live, and it was agreed that a weapon like the Elements would be necessary for the planet to survive. This planet, after all, had the attention of Discord. And the fallen alicorn, Satan, also made this planet his home, becoming the first demon when he saw the dragons native to Equestria and took their essence into himself. Celestia and Luna's parents were among those whose souls were used in the creation of the Elements.

In a sense, the Elements do have a predefined power level. It's just that they are far stronger than almost any individual being. The reason for their varying power levels is that they have a limiter on them. This was a defense mechanism so that they didn't deplete all their energy at once and leave themselves with a massive recharge period when something else horrifying and in need of blasting might come along at any moment. However, each use of the Elements unlocks a further level of power for the next attack, with the logic that if the Elements are being used more, then the situation is clearly more dire than expected, and more power is needed. Fully unrestrained, the Elements of Harmony can toss galaxies about like Team Gurren fighting the Anti-Spiral.

However, there are things in the universe more powerful than them. Specifically, there is one thing, and that is the Entity, because the Entity has literally infinite power. The thing about Lordforce is that it's capable of self-replicating. At a given time, the Entity does have a limited amount of power, but functionally, it does not, because it can instantly grant itself however much more power it wants, including enough that the Elements would mean nothing to it. That was what was happening to Second throughout the story: He was unconsciously granting himself ever more power as he felt he needed it. Without the Entity restricting him, that would've kept going if he'd stayed in Equestria instead of getting himself killed, and he would have eventually evolved into something akin to the Entity itself.

Now for your other question:

Two of a Kind was never written because it would've been a terrible story, and it was designed to be terrible. You know LoHAV? That's what it is. The plot of Two of a Kind was a LoHAV story before LoHAV was a thing, just minus the cosplay element and making there be two of them. It was written by Nathan, after all, who is stated in-universe to be a not very good writer that never quite grasped the tone of MLP. The whole story was Second and First showing up, acting like jackasses, and then having it bite them in the ass when one of them died and the other was trapped in stone.

Do you know why they had powers, aside from their connection to the entity? It was because when Nathan wrote the episode with them as the villains, he made them uber-badasses able to outfight entire armies as part of some "Humanity, fuck yeah!" thing, but never actually explained how they did it. They just implausibly became OP killing machines for no reason, and the whole episode was them achieving one impossible feat after another. Second and First having actual stated superpowers because of their presence in Equestria was not something Nathan added to the story, but was something that was contrived by later writers after him to explain the idiocy. Although we don't hear much about this particular bit (because why would Nathan bring it up?), Two of a Kind was regarded as terrible by pretty much everyone, a fandom-uniting episode more universally loathed than Mare-Do-Well. In fact, this is never actually said in the story, or it wasn't planned to be, at least, but Nathan actually stopped writing for the show specifically because of the hate he got for it.

That is why I never wrote Two of a Kind as its own story, that is why I never will, and that is why I advise against anybody else trying to do the same. Part of the original plan for Human was to deconstruct a lot of HiE tropes by exploring consequences rather than initial actions. Second and First coming to Equestria and being jackasses for forty minutes is not as important as the centuries-spanning fallout that came of it, and the massive impact it would later have on the world and characters.

And besides which, pretty much everything that Second and First did in those episodes was either mentioned in dialogue in enough detail that you get the idea, or else explicitly portrayed in flashback. I don't think it'd really be necessarily even if it wasn't a terrible story, since we already know basically everything. I can't even think of anything that didn't already get coverage.

Hope that answers your questions!

-DJ

All Second had to do was declare all fanfiction canon and then teleport every brony writer to Equestria and watched it torn apart by millions of shenanigans.

As it is, I never understood why Second used alicorns as shock troops and yet provided the only means to kill said troops en masse. it's like me creating a horde of water elementals who'll continuously reshape themselves and yet die when struck with electricity and then give all the much weaker troops swords made of lightning.

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Because he had to lose the battle at Canterlot. That was kind of the point of it.

2564915 I meant as kind of a last minute "Fuck You" to the ponies. It'd be him basically saying "You find 2 humans like us annoying, eh? Well how about a million of us!"

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What would be the point of that? Assuming he even could win with DC still existing in the universe, his projects would never see completion, he wouldn't have the ponies' help in destroying the Entity, and the story would have been thrown so far off the planned course of events that all the foreknowledge Nathan provided would become useless to him. Winning at Canterlot is about the worst thing he could do.

Read through Human again, but this time saw the link to here in the final chapter, thanks for the closure ,

You know, I get that you think the story was too stupid to continue. In hindsight, I think this story worked as well as it did for two reasons.

First, there was a lot of genuine gold in it. More than you're giving it credit for, to be sure, and you need to stop kicking yourself.

And second, I think the stupid was half the fun. You just took this pretentious and/or cliche crap that should never have produced anything readable, and then made it so completely, gloriously bugfuck insane that it worked.

And the "masturbate furiously" option would've led into a scene of a publisher staring down at a manuscript incredulously, revealing that the whole story was some cocaine-inspired work of an aspiring pony author that was just now handing it in for review by his publisher. The publisher is unable to comprehend what he is reading and asks why Silver suddenly started masturbating, only for the author to reveal that all 400K+ words of Human were actually just the prologue and first chapter for his real magnum opus, a pornographic novel fifty times as long entirely about Silver. The author is then arrested.

Dammit! We were only like fifteen chapters away from Best Ending!

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Oh, I know where its merits were. I never begrudged the story being insane. It was mostly all the technical flaws that I could never get over. That and a few individual jokes or lines that I don't think were necessary in hindsight. Like the Batman scene.

I forgot about this fic, came back, and saw it was cancelled. Then I read this blog.

I understand that you hate your own work, and that's why you cancelled it and stuff, etc, but I just want to say that while I was reading it, a long time ago, I couldn't help but to laugh every chapter. Regardless of how ridiculous the writing was, it WAS comedy gold. So, to me, you didn't fail, even if the story wasn't finished. I really wish I could have read some of these chapters, they sound hilarious.

Anyway, it sucks that you didn't finish it, but I enjoyed it for what it was, as did many others. So, if nothing else, take that to heart: you wrote a story that people enjoyed, even if you think that it wasn't good.

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The sentiment is appreciated.

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No problem. I just wanted to comment that because I see people cancel stories a lot, and they always say the same thing you did. Just in case you were feeling bad about it, not that it seems to bother you too much, since you're still writing, but yeah.

Do you have a plan to write another long story?

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As a matter of fact, I do!

As well as War Machine and the rebooted Van Helsing, I've got plans for several new long-runners. I've got one planned which has the working title of Daylight, loosely based on my original plans for Secopolis. I've got another one which will be either a single novel-length story or a series of only moderately long stories called One Thousand Years Ago. I have a Doctor Whooves story in the works called I Am the Doctor which will be an ongoing series that, theoretically, like Doctor Who itself, will never actually end. Another nameless story about Discord and Twilight traveling through another dimension is in the works. I've got Twilight, Season One, which I've been working on forever. And finally, I'm also writing a Dark Souls crossover called To Keep the Fire Burning.

hmmm some parts of this are a little iffy to me (then again I haven't actually read any of the newer chapters due to ahving lost my place and overall I don't like like people doing evil shit or seriosuly planning to do evil shit and getting unpunished for it or properly redeeming themselves but eh again I probably misread some stuff by skimming and also you know not reading the story since I find out its canceeled) but a lot of this is AMAZING and I wish you at elast used SOME of this stuff to finish it off. still, I GUESS this'll do, barring someone taking your story and finishing it/rewriting it themselves.

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