Tweakin' · 12:53pm May 22nd, 2012
Yeah so, great example of how comments show me what came across in my story and what didn't. A lot of people seemed to get the impression that Celestia was speaking for me at the end of the final chapter. I modified it so that that's not the case.
I may continue to massage the ending a little, but really it might help if you remember that I deliberately left some issues for the next story.
Twilight's relationship with SA & C is waaaaay too complex to address at the end of this story without seriously dragging the ending out. It would be like sticking a fourth act onto the end of Die Hard or something (not that I compare my story to the work of narrative perfection that is Die Hard). Once he saves the day, the audience isn't gonna stick around for the nitty gritty of how he deals with his personal life and tries to repair the relationship with his wife.
Like the comparison and understand completely
Well yeah, most people wouldn't stick around for a forth act on "Die Hard" save for the guess what? Fans who read Fan-fiction! Know your audience man!
By the way I like the ending and don't think you should change a thing. As for Cadence, if you really want to fit her into cannon (even though I think you have done a fabulous job explaining her immortality) all you have to do is maybe move the war she was five year to a decade if you want to get into the nitty gritty.