Apr
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Wonder what this means... (Equestria Daily) · 10:31pm Apr 11th, 2013
Thank you for your submission. However, due to issues with comma use, spelling, and capitalization, it cannot be forwarded to the pre-readers. This does not count as a strike.
All the best,
The EqD Team
Any idea what they mean?
This was The Unicorn at Hogwarts that they're referring to - if anyone spots a wrongly used comma, misspelling (remember, I use British commas and spelling, and so informed them) or wrong capitalization, let me know....
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I have no idea to tell you the truth. I like it and only complaint which isn't one is that I wish it would update more.
I just re-read it today, and did come across some random commas and capitalizations. It looked like half-finished edits, or places where sentences were rearranged but not 'finished'. I'll try and go back over it tonight or tomorrow, if I get the chance,
And I'll agree with Archivist; I would read more of this story.
1000565
Do check the British comma rules, to see if they're what I'm using... (I'm not certain myself.)
If there are comma misuses, I will be glad to correct them.
It's the "spelling and capitalization" which really confuses me...
1000456
Same thing.
To be really honest, they've been pretty helpful to me with "This is what I don't like." Have you tried mailing them back with a "Excuse me, could you elaborate a bit more. TUaH is written in british style, much as the HP novels, so certain british rules for spelling and grammar do apply." and see what they say?
Now I did notice a dangling participle in the second paragraph, and to be honest, the first paragraph *does* need a little more bang to it. It is, after all, the hook upon which the reader is baited into the rest of the story.
Send a reply asking if they have any British pre-readers, as you use both the spelling and the comma usage that Great Britain favors. I do believe that there were some capitalization issues in the chapters, but I can't remember anything specific at the top of my head.
I'd suggest finding a few pre-readers to deal with a specific thing: Spelling and Grammar (with the note of you using British-based spelling), Sentence structure, Characterization, Story fluid-ness, etc.
Have them know beforehand that they will be working alongside other pre-readers too, but ask them before that if they are comfortable with working with other pre-readers.
I'm not speaking from personal experience, it's just that's what I'll be doing when I finish planning out my HP/mlp Xover (which will having The Unicorn at Hogwarts having an honorable mention and listed as a source of inspiration, so thanks for that!).
1000582
Terribly sorry, I was actually re-reading a completely different MLP/HP story today. Sorry I can't be of much help; I did look back over the first chapter quickly, and didn't notice much out of the ordinary. There are plenty of comas, but they all seem appropriate to me.