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  • 2w, 3d
    SA Reviews - Round 70!

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  • 3w, 5d
    Kaorin's "Selling Out" [Royal Canterlot Library]

    Today's story reminds us that the one constant in life is change — so keep your coin purse close by when you pay with a big bill.

    Selling Out

    [Slice of Life] • 2,361 words

    When the time of monarchs and royals ends, what becomes of Princesses who live on?

    FROM THE CURATORS: This is exactly what it says on the tin — a story about a pony coming to grips with modern capitalism.  We started out worried that such a premise seemed like a recipe for soapboxing, but this story quickly vaulted past those doubts to unanimous approval. As JohnPerry said, "I think it says something when a story gives you a premise that's hard to swallow, but still manages to impress you."

    The biggest factor in that was Selling Out's arresting portrayal of its protagonist. "The voicing really is the draw," Present Perfect said, and JohnPerry was more broadly appreciative: "The characterization of Luna is absolutely marvelous, and the larger historical landscape this story merely touches upon is very intriguing."  Horizon, meanwhile, found the two sides of Luna poignantly juxtaposed: "The contrast in tone between her regal narration and her out-loud dialogue is proper heartbreaking."

    It wasn't only the characterization that impressed us, but also its excellent choice of character.  "Seeing Luna in this situation, harboring all of her pride and past hurts, is so much more heartbreaking than seeing Celestia, or Cadance, or even Twilight would be," Present Perfect said.  "Luna's the one who's already fallen once, and she fell so much further than this." The story's nuanced portrayal of the world around her sealed the deal. "What strikes me the most is the 'long view' of Equestrian society," AugieDog said.  "Yes, ponies will learn and grow and discover new and different things, but they will always be ponies.  And their princesses will always be there when they're needed — even if what they're needed for changes and shrinks and grows back differently as the pendulum of the centuries swings to and fro."

    Ultimately, by treading a careful path across the razor's-edge of modern cynicism, Selling Out left us with a thought-provoking message. "The idea of balancing duty, pride, and commercialism is one that's more applicable to many of our real-life idols than we might like to admit," Chris said.

    Read on for our author interview, in which Kaorin discusses technological singularity, paycheck relevance, and post-apotheosis continuations.

    Give us the standard biography.

    30/F/USA No?

    I am, I suppose, Kaorin. I edit more than I write, and I’ve held more jobs than I can count. I like to learn what it is to do the work that keeps the world moving. I am a cognitive neuroscientist by training, though I took a long look at academia and decided that I could never accomplish what I wanted were I to follow that path.

    Instead I decided on the lucrative career of whatever the temp agency gives me on any given day. Seriously, I actually recommend to anyone out there that they spend some time with any such agency and go from job to job just learning how and what people do out there every day.

    How did you come up with your handle/penname?

    I’ve always had a yen for cute shows. Back when the internet and I were both young I watched a little anime called Azumanga Daioh. A simple slice of life about a group of girls and their everyday adventures as they grow up. In the show there’s a girl whose spastic character amused me in her contrast with, and similarity to, myself. I chose to adopt her name as a moniker in my forays online and it has stuck with me since.

    Who's your favorite pony?

    Twilight Sparkle without hesitation. It helps that she is the central character, the one who receives the greatest care and attention from the writing staff, but she would be my favorite even if that were not so.

    The Monomyth, also called the Hero’s Journey, describes Twilight’s character arc. What makes her journey remarkable is that it is largely couched in terms of a modern coming of age, what it is to take on the responsibilities of adulthood. There’s the occasional hydra or Equestria-shaking threat, but outside those her challenges are all quite relatable. Squabbles with friends, insecurity, pressures to perform, failure and success. Each time she rises to the occasion and becomes more for it without ever losing who she’s always been: an adorkable bookworm.

    I think what truly cemented her as my favorite, however, is that once she reached her apotheosis the story continued. The tacit lesson that even once you attain your goals, once you grasp what you’ve reached for, there will be more challenges and more room to grow. It’s an extension of theme that is seen but rarely and I treasure that. Also, she’s just my type.

    What's your favorite episode?

    A question with no answer. At least, that would have been so had I not seen "Do Princesses Dream of Magic Sheep?" The lesson is superb, the call-backs and tie-ins graceful, the character exploration handled expertly, and best of all the Tantabus! Oh wow the Tantabus. Visually stunning and conceptually brilliant.

    What do you get from the show?

    Life is not always vibrant or full of good cheer. It is always a pleasure to have something cute to hand as a remedy for dreary days. An abnegation of sorts. Setting aside the cares of the world and refreshing oneself with clean art, quality voice acting, compelling stories and characters, and relatable life lessons will rarely go amiss with me.

    What do you want from life?

    It is good you did not ask me what is best in life. I would have a rather different answer. I want from life what most do: to live long enough to be part of the transhumanist revolution and join in the technological singularity.

    Why do you write?

    I write because I have a story I must to tell. It is both as simple and as complex as that. I write because there are things I wish say, and I write because I need to create, and I write because I enjoy the challenge.

    What advice do you have for the authors out there?

    The most common bits of advice are to read the works of masters past and present, and to write and keep writing. These are uncontroversially the best things any writer can do to improve, but I will share something I personally do when approaching a writing challenge: derive from first principles.

    In any situation you face while writing, there will be things that came before that must shape the outcome. It’s a simple way of making sure you as the author know how and why things came to be, and it will help show you where they must go. Your characters are motivated by things that have happened to them, and your world will always be shaped by its history. Make sure you know about it!

    What influences shaped this story's view of a "modern" Equestria?

    As I said, I try to derive from first principles. With Selling Out the idea kernel was “Wouldn’t it be funny to see Luna in a modern style commercial?” In order to write about that I had to figure out what would have to change about Equestria to allow one of the royal sisters to engage in crass commercialism. I decided they would need to be deposed yet still remain meaningful as symbols, and for that I looked to the retirement, for lack of a better term, of the state powers of the British monarchy. The rest flowed naturally from there.

    How did you decide which archaisms to keep and discard for future Luna's voice?  Any voicing tips for Luna authors?

    Just like each of the Mane 6 has a distinct silhouette, they each have an easily identifiable set of linguistic idiosyncrasies. I decided early on that I needed Luna to have something that hooked a reader’s interest. Not merely the cadence nor the vocabulary, but a distinct vocal tic. I chose a flexible exclamatory noise by the expedient that I needed a way for her to roll her eyes internally.

    I decided to discard the anachronistic speech patterns since it is set some few centuries after the show, and I do believe Luna would do her best to inculcate a more modern pattern. The exception being, as I well know from my own slips into the accent of my birth, when she’s excited or upset. I did, however, decide to keep a particularly barbed and haughty tone, as I believed that would fit in with the snarky and decidedly bitter Luna I felt needed to exist if she was to star in a commercial.

    As to voicing the less even-keeled of the two royal sisters, my advice would be to remember who she is. Were I to write the story now, I could not in good conscience make her as snarky and jagged-edged as I did back when we had seen hardly a trace of her in the show. Now that we’ve seen her more regularly I feel confident in saying that Luna is aloof by dint of a self-flagellating seriousness, and has chosen to armor herself in the imperious role of Princess. To write her well, I believe, would require a certain understanding of what it means to seek redemption for wrongs already forgiven, and what it means to see yourself as alone even when surrounded by friends.

    Luna says the job provides her with meaning as well as money.  Did you write that sentiment as sincere, or to illustrate a character in denial?

    Absolutely sincere. I firmly believe that we are what we do and this bled over into writing Luna. The Paycheck is relevance. Luna, a public servant for millennia and admitted seeker of public recognition and adoration, is absolutely in no need of mere money. Indeed I imagine the two sisters would be rather well to do no matter the changes of the world. What that sort of money cannot buy is a sense of purpose in life. So Luna decided to seek that in the spotlight, and though she evidently feels often slighted, she also feels needed.

    This is quite a tale for a first FIMFiction story.  What are your plans for future fanfics?

    I am an exceptionally inconstant writer. I have many ideas for stories, but I have a nasty tendency to set challenges for myself that make those stories far more difficult to produce than they ought to be. In light of that, and I stress I can make no promises of any kind, but there is a story I have been working on which takes place in the same Equestria as Selling Out, but focuses on Spike.

    Is there anything else you'd like to add?

    It’s more than a little surprising that this little old story of mine caught the notice of this group, I’m rather gratified. And if anyone just happens to need an editor, well, I do rather enjoy it.

    You can read Selling Out at Read more interviews right here at the Royal Canterlot Library, or suggest stories for us to feature at our Fimfiction group.

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  • 4w, 2d
    Groups Post - August 2015

    Groups Posts are a monthly group advertisement blog open to anyone who wants a signal boost. If you're interested in having your group advertised in one of these, send me a PM with the name of the group, a link to its front page, and a brief description of what the group is for. I'll copy this directly into the post, so write it like you're trying to tell other people about why they should join or pay attention to your group - anything up to around 150-ish words is fine.

    Helping Hooves is exactly what it sounds like: a place where you can find a helping hoof to lend you a hand.

    Need help or feedback on your story? Are you new and need someone to show you around the site? Do you have a question about something, Fimfiction-related or not?

    Anything you need, any question you have, post a comment and someone will be there to help you out and answer you.

    If you don't need any help and you'd like to help others, you can always lend some.

    Hazardous Writing Materials and Challenges

    The groups aim is to provide a sociable environment to enjoy unorthodox and inventive contests organized by a group of users used to organizing the odd competition, and write short stories to prompts posted weekly. We welcome ideas and writing styles of all sorts so long as you're willing to push yourself and take a risk or two towards improvement and (hopefully) success.

    It should be a great place to find other talented authors, show off a little, and practice writing amongst users with a bit of friendly competition.

    The Birthday Association

    Are you looking to celebrate your birthday on this very fanfiction site itself with your internet friends? Does that very special day seem... unfulfilling? Well, we here at The Birthday Association are here to help you! With just a simple comment, anypony can get the B-Day love that they may want and/or deserve! So, make your wish now!


    Welcome to Twiluna! Where we worship the almighty ship of Twilight and Luna! Wanna join? Click here and then hit the subscribe join button in the top right corner! After you've done so, ask about our Tuna and Tuna accessories branch. P.S. Beware of cults in the group. We take our worship alittle too seriously sometimes.

    Applejack's Parents

    Applejack's parents are mysterious figures.

    Who were they?

    What were they like?

    How did they die?

    This group is devoted to the collection of stories about Applejack's parents in any capacity.

    Sad Luna

    A group to explore Princess Luna's tragic history, conflicted personality, and ongoing struggle to come to terms with her failures. Includes sad Luna fact repository for inspiration and convenience, updated as needed with canon details. Folders are arranged according to sadness level. Contests will be held if/when membership becomes large enough.

    My Little Lyrics

    Welcome to My Little Lyrics, a group dedicated to all those MLP-related music lovers out there, no matter if mare, stallion, colt or filly.

    This group is pretty new and got a focus on beautiful songs and their lyrics, but also every story here on fimfiction fitting the topic.

    We would love to have new members discussing their favorite song and/or it's lyrics, among with some games and other stuff!

    Write my fic for me

    Do you have a ton of ideas but for some reason just can't get them down to publish on fimfiction? Are you always looking for new ideas to write? Then this is the group for you! Here you can post your ideas and writers will help bring them to life or be the one bringing the ideas to life. All types are welcome!

    Prayer Requests and Praises is exactly like it sounds. Here we pray for people and their needs, share our own prayer requests, and focus on the good things in our lives to be thankful for. We have monthly prayer meetings that are hosted by fellow members, and an official Prayer list thread that will be updated with each new request by the admin, Pencil Melody. If you wish to remain anonymous, just send a pm concerning your prayer request to the admin. If you're going through a hard time, but don't want religion crammed down your throat, we're here to talk to you and pray.  So, come on and join today.

    That's it for August. See you all next month!

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  • 5w, 5d
    Vote hiding for stories with low vote counts

    To eliminate problems where stories that have very few votes can be sunk by only 1-2 people disliking them, stories with under 15 votes no longer display rating data to anyone but the author. This should give everyone a fair chance at success, even with a couple early haters, but actually-bad stories should quickly-enough accumulate enough downvotes to show as negative that you can still easily avoid them.

    We will adjust the number of votes required for visibility later if needed.

    Edit: the threshold is now 10, looking into some time-based stuff for older stories.

    463 comments · 6,700 views
  • 5w, 5d
    archonix's "To Be A Mule" [Royal Canterlot Library]

    15 comments · 1,054 views
  • 6w, 6d
    Reviews! Round 69

    19 comments · 2,011 views
  • 7w, 4d
    S5E13 - Do Princesses Dream of Magic Sheep?

    278 comments · 5,080 views
  • 7w, 5d
    Bronetheus' "Waiting For Celestia"

    1 comments · 1,685 views
  • 8w, 4d
    S5E12 - Amending Fences

    252 comments · 5,086 views
  • 8w, 5d
    Groups Post - July 2015

    Groups Posts are a monthly group advertisement blog open to anyone who wants a signal boost. If you're interested in having your group advertised in one of these, send me a PM with the name of the group, a link to its front page, and a brief description of what the group is for. I'll copy this directly into the post, so write it like you're trying to tell other people about why they should join or pay attention to your group - anything up to around 150-ish words is fine.

    To celebrate summer and all its fun, Poniverse Fimfiction and MLP Forums are once again hosting a fanfiction contest.  This time around, we're asking writers to enter fics about Poniverse's very own mascots themselves, the best of which will be accepted into Poniverse canon.  There's lots of special prizes in store for the winners, and for more information about the contest itself, click on the following link:

    Poniverse Mascot Summerpalooza Contest!  Happy writing! :twilightsmile:

    Victorious Antagonists

    What fun is there in always seeing the protagonist come out on top?  If you're one of those types who likes to see chaos reign, darkness shroud the land, equality spread across the land, empires crumble, mean ponies get away with their misdeeds, towns devoured, ponies kidnapped or just generalized mayhem, this group is for you!

    The Related Story Finders is pretty straightforward new group, if you need help finding a story that is like another story or want a recommendation for a story this is the place to be. Rule will be updated as needed and new members are welcome.

    Nostalgia Dig-Ups

    This is where you can post stories from nostalgia or suggest ideas from anything nostalgic that you think can make a great crossover.

    Endoscopic Adventures

    A collection of MLP stories devoted to Endosomatophilia. What is Endosomatophilia? It is anything involving a tiny being traveling throughout the body of a giant host. Imagine Fantastic Voyage, the movie Inner Space, or the TV show Magic School Bus, and you'll have the hang of it.

    The Apple Scratch Verse

    In a humanized version of Equestria, Vinyl Scratch ends up being the adopted sister of the monster of a woman known as Jacquelyn "Applejack" Apple when she was six years old. Many years later, Vinyl, her sister and their friends embark in a series of adventure through the lands of Equestria and even beyond... Contains heroic-fantasy/anime-like fights, fluffy romances, and (hopefully) lots of humor.

    The Filly Club

    Do you think that fillies (and colts) are adorable? If you do, The Filly Club is THE place for all of your filly and colt needs, whether you're here to post your stories or read stories about foals. Join and be part of the family!


    We are a growing group that love to have nice, clean, drama-free fun in our forums. We welcome new users with a pat on the back and a nice warm hug that lets them feel at home. With group art, music posts, AMAs, and general chats, we're every social user's dream. Though we are a group with a large scale of activities, in order to protect the group we do have rules. Many rules. And these rules are enforced to ensure that other users' experiences are not jeopardized by a few others' bad choices.

    So come on down to Higashikaigan's Off Topic and see that sometimes being off topic can be a bit fun!~:heart:

    That's it for this month. Don't forget to submit your groups if you want them in the post for August!

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  • 8w, 5d
    Reviews! Round 68

    10 comments · 1,221 views
  • 8w, 5d
    zaponator's "Blink" [Royal Canterlot Library]

    11 comments · 1,312 views
  • 9w, 4d
    S5E11 - Party Pooped

    190 comments · 3,426 views
  • 9w, 6d
    New Server

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Site Post » Reviews Round 18 · 11:57pm

Meanwhile, deep beneath the Earth’s crust, in the subterranean volcano lair of the Seattle’s Angels FiMfic Rangers, alexmagnet, Pav Femur, and Nicknack plan their next move.

“So... it’s, like, Thursday. Where are we at?” Alex asks as he reaches across the coffee table to grab the remote and shut the TV off, eliciting groans from both Pav and Nick.

“When are they supposed to go up again?” Pav asks with as little effort as possible.

“Wednesday,” says Nick.

“Yeah, last Wednesday...”

Pav swipes a bottle of beer from the table and cracks it open with his ham hock-like fists. “This weekend is April Fool’s, right?”

“Well, yeah, I guess.” Alex grabs his own beer and gives it to Pav to open. “Thanks, but, what’s your point?” he asks as takes the bottle back.

A knowing look enters Nick’s eye as smile crosses his lips. Pav notices and nods his head. “That’s right. We use April Fool’s as a ruse to draw attention away from our delayed reviews.”

Nick grabs a third beer from the table. “It’s genius.”

Alex rubs his chin. “Hmm, yeah, I suppose that could work. We can probably come up with some April Fool’s stuff in less than a day, and then that gives us another week to get these reviews done.”

“It’s settled then,” says Nick as he gives Pav a thankful nod.

They all lean forward and clink their bottles together, shouting in unison, “Procrastination!”


“So... it’s, like, Thursday. Where are we at?”




Fluttershy's Terribly Busy Day, by Sanctae


As someone who's been in this fandom for a while now (not since it started, but before Season 1 ended), I've noticed something weird about the [Slice of Life] tag—no one uses it right because it's a very difficult thing to classify a story as. A good [Romance] story is going to follow the characters' lives as they get to know one another. A good [Dark] story is going to show how someone's life is dark, dreary, and generally unhappy. A good [Sad] story is going to be the [Slice of Life] of someone who's having a bad day, or week, or month...

Or David Schwimmer's Career

So believe me when I say that Fluttershy's Terribly Busy Day is one of the stories I read that could have totally fit the [Slice of Life] tag. I'm not saying that Sanctae should add it though; it is a [Sad] and [Dark] story in its own right. But what I like about this story is how, at first, it appears to be a story set in the background of another story. Like, it's obvious that there's something else going on, but Fluttershy, in her usual Fluttershy-ness, wants no part of it. Instead, she goes about her day and, all is fine and dandy.

It's an interesting take on storytelling, and it's done in a matter that doesn't make me wish the author had shown the "important" part of the story. Really, Sanctae makes Fluttershy's day-to-day life the important part of the story. My only real issue I had with this story was that at certain times, the narration got a tad hazy—especially the blink-and-you-miss-it conflict resolution near the end of the story (I try not to put spoilers in this thing, but I think the ending of this story could've packed more punch if handled differently).

Still, Fluttershy's Terribly Busy Day is a decent story, and well worth the time commitment you'd put into it if you pick it up. At the end of the day, that's all that matters, right?

Pav Feria:

Well, Alex is in this round, and naturally that means that one of the fics we review is tagged [Dark].

Which begs the question: why aren’t I abusing my position to push my own agenda? Oh right, because I’m lazy.

But enough about our personal vices for now. We’re here to talk about good fanfiction. Is Fluttershy’s Terribly Busy Day good? Spoilers: yes. Why? It’s confusing.

Not in the sense of being lost during the read; you might start to guess at the ending before you’ve finished. Not in the sense of being unable to figure everything out after the end; we’ve covered bigger headscratchers here in the past, and besides, true to form in this genre of story, there’s a large reveal that helps to put all of the pieces together.

That right there is the key: the pieces. For a fairly quick read at 4,000 words, this story is so dense with its puzzle pieces. So many of the lines herein are odd, foreshadowing in nature, half-explained, or even contradictory. Why doesn’t Fluttershy care for westerlies? Why was Applejack upset with her? Why hasn’t the laundry dried yet? Like a 4,000-piece puzzle, these oddities start to snap together and build a picture—the start of a cloud here—the beginnings of a windmill there—these smaller elements start to combine into a landscape. It’s such that at the end, when we’re given one last, big reveal, we know much. It’s not simply a reveal that “the butler was the murderer” and thus the mystery is over and we can go home. We know the butler’s life story, his itinerary for the heinous day, and his aspirations for his daughter at boarding school. It may take some time to assemble every one of the pieces, but it’s all there for you, if you take the time to put it together.

It’s for that economy that I appreciate this story. Telling a story with a hundred thousand words and opaque language can be simple and straightforward, if a large investment of time and emotion. But to write 4k where there is perhaps one singular ray of clarity, and yet so much can be divined from the text, is impressive for the author, not to mention a treat for the reader.


Being busy could be fun when you spent the time with friends.

Ah, [Dark] fics, what’s not to love about stories that often go in a completely different direction from canon, or display undertones not found in the show? Nothing, that’s what. Now, contrary to what Pav said, this fic was not actually suggested by me, though I was quick to approve it. In fact, Casca, our resident Fluttershy fan, was the one who originally said, “Hey, this thing’s pretty good.” Being the skeptical guy I am (and not a fan of Fluttershy fics), I didn’t exactly have high hopes for Fluttershy’s Terribly Busy Day. Little did I know just how good it was going to be.

Don’t you just want to punch her in the face?

All right, so let’s get into the meat of this review. What makes Fluttershy’s Terribly Busy Day so good? Well, for starters, it’s well-written, flows smoothly, has a strong narrative voice, and does an excellent job of capturing Fluttershy’s personality. However, that’s not what makes me love this story. No, its main strength lies Santcae’s ability to not tell us stuff while still telling us everything we need to know. In the world of fiction, this is known as “showing”, and, if you have any experience writing, or working with writers, you’ve likely heard the phrase “show; don’t tell” before.

In an effort to not make this a lengthy discussion about show vs. tell, I’ll just say that this fic is an excellent example of how to use telling to your advantage, by drawing attention to the things you don’t tell the readers, and leaving them to fill in the gaps themselves.

On its surface, Fluttershy’s Terribly Busy Day is a somewhat light-hearted journey through a day in the life of Fluttershy, but underneath lies a much darker and more sinister story. As you peel away the layers and read between the lines, you start to realize there is so much more to the story than we’re being told, and that’s the beauty of it. This is a fic that rewards its readers’ attentiveness, and allows itself to grow into something far darker than you would have imagined had you only read without truly understanding all the subtext and unwritten truths.

Short though it may be, Fluttershy’s Terribly Busy Day is one of those fics which will stick with me a long time. This is [Dark] done right, though it’s not the only way to do it right. So, if you have any love at all for [Dark] fics, or you just like being rewarded for reading between the lines, then give this fic a chance. I promise you won’t regret it. Unless you do, in which case... I don’t promise that.


Kindness, by TwilightSnarkle


There's a lot to be said about Twilight Snarkle. He helped form the fanfic review community in this fandom back when it started. He's been one of the three people who have helped me with my own stories since the beginning. He wrote the fandom's only bearable Sonic crossover, and he took it and made it good.

He also hosts his own cooking channel on YouTube

So, I'll sum his writing with a statement of, "When he wants you to feel an emotion, you will feel that emotion."

Kindness is one of the earlier stories from the fandom that technically never got canon-rolled, since the author set it in an alternate universe to begin with. It deviates from the show by asking, "What would happen to everyone if Twilight Sparkle didn't stick around after the first two episodes?" I like the idea of Twilight being the glue that holds together the main six ponies, and that they didn't really hang out all that often before she showed up, and Kindness does a good job at showing how Fluttershy would probably end up.

So, did this story hold up over the past two years? Yes. It's well-written, and any sort of discrepancies it has with the show would be more than forgiveable. Similarly, one of the critiques of it that I heard a while ago was "Princess Luna's sudden appearance," but… I don't really notice it. It's a short fic, but a poignant one, and I highly recommend you read it.

Pav Fema:

Jeez, poor Fluttershy. Second story in a row where her life is a shit salad. Don’t worry; you’ll always be “10/10, would snuggle” in my book.

*snuggles her protectively while glaring at Alex*

Originally written back in the summer of S1, Kindness is a bit of a blast-from-the-past. Having defeated Nightmare Moon, Twilight Sparkle returns to Canterlot to continue her studies under Princess Celestia. Game over, the end. The six Element-Bearers go their separate ways. We rejoin Fluttershy a few years after the events of that adventure, and... yeah. She could be better.

When I first saw the episode Cutie Mark Chronicles, even though I was swept up in a great episode and S1 hype in general, a small cynical part of me couldn’t help but agree with Spike’s assessment at the end. “Their friendship was all predestined? You and your future friends might be looking at the same rainbow? I’m a sucker for this new show’s idealism, but c’mon.” Even if idealistic, though, the evidence speaks for itself. After a recent conversation with a friend about density and free-will in FiM, he pointed out that cutie marks are a form of destiny; it’s hard to imagine an alternate universe where RD earned a cutie mark in adventure fiction, as that would create such a drastically different pony. (Magical Mystery Cure even seems to strengthen this argument, seeing how even receiving different cutie marks can’t suddenly instill a sense of fulfillment into the ponies.) Since the acquirement of the Mane Six’s cutie marks was tied to this single triggering event, we can really see the thread of destiny running all throughout their lives, from their cutie marks to Nightmare Moon, all the way to Twilight’s ascension and beyond.

True story.

So here then, is a sharp derailment from destiny, and it definitely shows in the narrative. Fluttershy, Element of Kindness, complete with the necklace to prove it, is alone. There’s really not much that I can say here without spoiling; the vignette is largely a character study of Fluttershy via this AU version of herself. Suffice it to say, she’s not particularly fulfilled, and she has some choice words on the matter. In the end, facing a “nice mares finish last” viewpoint on her reality, she begins to question her kindness. I’d make a joke about “if a mare is kind in the forest and nopony is there to see it” (because she’s a tree, get it), but that would be mood-killing.

As I said, unfortunately I can’t really elaborate much on why I recommend it, for risk of spoiling the vignette and not doing it justice. At a quick 2.6k though, it’s a fast read, emotive, sometimes forcefully so, yet genuinely tugs at sympathies. If you’re looking for an excuse to want to give Fluttershy a hug, look no further.


“Sometimes, it just takes a little Kindness.”

I had not read Kindness before, and even though it’s quite old, I’d never even heard of it, so I wasn’t sure what to expect when I did read it. To be quite honest, I didn’t expect very much. Kindness was written waaaaaaaay back during the yesteryear of our post-Season 1 bliss, a time when, to be frank, everyone’s standards, as well as my own, were lower. I’ve often found going back and reading things I liked then has left me somewhat disappointed, finding out that they were never very good to begin with. So, I’m quite happy to say that Kindness is in fact very good, and has remained very good even through the passage of time.

Time is the nostalgia killer.

Much as Pav has already said, it’s difficult to talk about what makes Kindness good without giving away its incredibly short plot. Honestly, I wasn’t sure I’d like it at first. I read the first third or so and wondered why Nick had suggested it, thinking it was just another feelbad fic with nothing new to offer. But, as soon as Luna shows up, everything changed for me. I absolutely loved her voice, her demeanor, everything about her. All of it came together so well that it altered my opinion of this fic quite rapidly.

Now, I do have to say that, while very emotive, and often done in a very real way, some of the “heart-wrenching” stuff is a bit hamfisted. One part in particular felt somewhat... forced, I suppose you could say. But overall, Kindness is a sadfic done well, and, even more impressive, it was written during a time when sad!Luna fics were all the rage and it still managed to be unique.

That’s the other thing about Kindness, its backdrop is one I’ve never actually seen before, though I’ve no doubt it’s been done since. It’s an interesting alternate reality that creates a decidedly more weepy world, a world that I would actually like to see explored more. Though, I doubt that will actually happen. Anyway, as short as Fluttershy’s Terribly Busy Day was, Kindness is even shorter, and once again became a Fluttershy fic that I didn’t absolutely hate. So yeah... go read it.


Space Captain Pinkie Pie, by terrycloth


There are a lot of strange fic ideas in this fandom. I mean, hell, if you think about it, we're all writing fanfics about My Little Pony, and that's pretty strange in and of itself. So, I'm a jaded sonuvabitch when it comes to this fandom and "novel" ideas; with the volume of fics I've read, preread, and reviewed at this point, not a lot fazes me.

By the time I read Sweet Apple Massacre, I'd already seen some shit.

So, I won't really say that Space Captain Pinkie Pie really struck me as an original fic premise. I've read "pony space race" before (though the one I read was between griffins and ponies). Heck, even Spacegirl touched on a lot of the elements from Space Captain Pinkie Pie. Still, on its own, it tells a story of the main six ponies, going about on fan-made adventures. It's got their characterization well-done, and really, that's all you can ask for in fanfiction.

I'm a tad iffy on if I'd recommend this to someone, to be honest. It's 90,000 words long—that starts to hit on "opportunity cost" levels of length, where you could probably read a published novel instead (like the first Harry Potters, or 1984). I wasn't a big fan of the writing style on this, either—a little dry, in terms of a trip that took the better part of a day to traverse; also, the story emulated the show, so a lot of the humor was hit-or-miss for me.

So, it's good for a fanfic. That's probably the best thing I can say about this story, and I encourage you to at least make up your own mind about the first few chapters.

Per Feira:

I could say a lot of things about terrycloth’s longfic comedic adventure. Lots of nitpicky things. I could complain about the tonal shift part-way through, when it shifts from episodic/slapstick hijinks into primarily a pony-vs.-nature survival adventure (with comedic elements). I could gripe about a few too many recycled jokes/references from the show, especially early on. I could whine that certain plot elements, while sometimes foreshadowed, still felt like they were coming out of left field in an unsatisfying manner, elements of the ending included.

I could also list some of the items found within this story, which I had to whittle down to minimize spoilers: sustainable lunar space travel, pillow forts, cake-based counterspells, public-key cryptography, songs (plural!), alternate realities clones, slug pits, cybertech, ancient prophecies (of doom!), and ramp physics.

One or more of these elements may not go exactly according to plan.

Space Captain Pinkie Pie is fun and creatively artistic. It takes plenty of risks by continuously upping the ante on a chapter-by-chapter basis, or throwing wild curveballs that you’d never expect to see with a premise like, “Dashie, let’s throw a party with the moon ponies!” (Not all of those curveballs are Pinkie’s fault, even!) Risk does come with failure at times—and “where” is a question that must be answered on an individual basis—but it can also result in great triumph. There were plenty of moments herein where I was laughing through a facepalmy punchline, mirthing at an apropos-of-not-much plot element that seamlessly wove itself into the plotline, or spamming a number of my friends with quotable lines.

It was for this—not simply the humor, but the fun—that I truly enjoyed this fic. Striving for literary excellence is well and good, and has its time and place. But on a site like this, of hobbyists practicing a trade for naught but entertainment for themselves and their peers, isn’t fun a massive reason behind why we’re all here? Fun for the audience, obviously, but it’s also a delight to see a story where quite clearly the author himself was having fun. Stories like this can quite often be a very refreshing gust of air, just when everything starts to feel a wee bit “same-y.”

Just, y’know. Remember to pack sunscreen.


“Pinkie Pie, I’m taking you to the moon!”

Let me count the ways Space Captain Pinkie Pie has made me laugh, but not really, because that would literally take all day. Seriously, I love this fic more than you could possibly know.

So before I start with the actual review, I’m gonna let you guys in on a little secret: I hate Pinkie. I hate her so much, and I’ve only grown to hate her more as the show progresses. To be fair, she has a few moments where I actually like her, but for the most part her wall-to-wall silliness just wears thin after about the first eight and half seconds of her being on-screen. Even more than Fluttershy, I hate every episode about her. Even with the awesome Trainspotting reference, I can’t stand watching the Baby Cakes episode. It’s literally painful for me. So, it’s no small thing to say that a fic about Pinkie Pie may be one of my favorite fics of all time.

One of these days, Pinkie. One of these days. BANG. ZOOM. Straight to the Moon!

In what is possibly the longest [Adventure][Comedy] I have ever read, Space Captain Pinkie Pie manages to simultaneously be one of my favorite adventure fics, as well as one of the funniest comedies I’ve read on FiMfic.

In a bid to find herself on the Moon, and possibly throw a moon party for the moon ponies (on the Moon), Pinkie manages to convince Rainbow Dash to fly her to the moon. Yes, Rainbow Dash is literally going to fly straight up to the Moon. It’s gonna be a long flight. Of course, things don’t go exactly as planned. Who would’ve thought that rapid acceleration would cause friction with the air and ignite Rainbow Dash in a glorious ball of fire? Apparently not Twilight, or anyone else for that matter. After much deliberation, and a lot of research, Pinkie Pie, Rainbow Dash, Twilight, and a few others, try again. To avoid any more spoilers, I’ll leave the rest unsaid. Suffice it to say, the ponies’ journey to the Moon is as hilarious as it is exciting.

There are two things that Space Captain Pinkie Pie does exceptionally well, and that is: comedy and adventure. And hey, wouldn’t you know it, that’s the two genres it claims to be! Let me clarify a bit. SCPP does something which I think many authors, myself included, struggle to accomplish: capture Pinkie’s character as it is meant to be. Often I find that authors misinterpret Pinkie as being a completely random character who is more or less off in her own world all the time. However, I would argue that Pinkie is far more grounded than people make her out to be and is in fact one of the more well-rounded characters, especially with regards to Season 1. So, I was very happy with SCPP when terrycloth managed to capture that so well.

The other thing it does well, as I said, is it really captures that sense of adventure that is sometimes hard to firmly grasp. You really get the feel that what they’re doing is a first for their kind, and it harkens back to the early days of the Space Program, and the feeling that you get (or at least I do) when you look up at the sky and realize just how much is out there that we don’t know about. Space Captain Pinkie Pie is a very rewarding adventure story, and it’s damn funny to boot. However, unlike the other two fics this week, it is not short, not by any stretch of the imagination. But, I promise you that it is well worth your time. Even if you’re like me, and you hate Pinkie Pie, you will love this fic.

Pav wipes the non-existent sweat from his brow. “Phew, we made it through another round, guys.”

Nick nods grimly. “Yes, but at what cost?”

Pav shrugs. “Like $6.50 I guess. I mean, that’s how much the beer was.”

Nick turns out his empty pockets and opens his wallet. A single moth lazily flutters out.

“At least we got through unscathed, and no one realized that April Fool’s was just an excuse to buy us more time, right?” Alex says. “So, I guess that means we win... or something.”

“Yeah, I guess so,” says Pav.

“Now we just gotta decide who’s going to write the intro and outro for this week,” says Nick. “I’m way too busy doing stuff, so it can’t be me.”

“Same,” says Pav. “I’m busy doing, y’know, whatever it is that I do.”

They both turn to look at Alex. He groans and rolls his eyes.

“Goddammit, fine...”

Special thanks to Lhmac, AugieDog, Phazon, and Cassius for the recommendations we’ve used thus far.

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#1 · 125w, 1d ago · 8 · ·

Casca, our resident Fluttershy fan

Excuse me, sir, but he isn't the only one.

#2 · 125w, 1d ago · 2 · 1 ·


He's been here longer...

#3 · 125w, 1d ago · · 1 ·

This is the first of the reviews that I actually read completely through in quite a while.... don't judge me.... I just.... you know, have stuff to do.... and stuff and I thoroughly enjoyed it. (especially the beginning and end.)

I'll have to check out these fics, they all sound worthwhile, especially the first two.

And Alex, I definitely agree with you, I am not the biggest fan of Fluttershy or Pinkie Pie fics (or episodes), to me both the characters wear thin pretty quickly.

#4 · 125w, 1d ago · 3 · ·


That's what you think.

#5 · 125w, 1d ago · · ·

Yes! I'm now two for four on getting my recs featured. Now if you'll excuse me, someone has to draw Sanctae's attention to...

Wait, Round 18?! But then the April Fools' bullshit on Round 17... and considering that unlucky 13 bullshit from earlier... That means either April Fools' changed nothing or it screwed up the numbering of the rounds even worse than before.

Damn you, Pav! :twilightangry2: Damn you to Pony Hell Purgatory!

Now I have to bitch twice as hard as before. :applecry:

#6 · 125w, 1d ago · 4 · ·


I hate Pinkie. I hate her so much, and I’ve only grown to hate her more as the show progresses. [...] Even more than Fluttershy.


You ought to know by now that I draw my sole sustenance from the outrage of commenters. No, really, these guys have seen what I look like. I'm a twig.

#7 · 125w, 1d ago · · ·

Anypony care to review one of my stories?...I mean, if that's okay with you. :fluttershysad:

#8 · 125w, 1d ago · · ·

>>995290 Yes, I know. And you ought to know that I'm kind of a tongue-in-cheek person, or at the very least April has become my tongue-in-cheek month. But I will be bringing up the numbering screw-up slightly more constantly than I was before, up until the day I die. Or until Fimfiction dies... whichever comes first :applejackunsure:. Until then, I will resume my role as the most active nobody in Seattle's Angels.

... wrong kind of Nobody.

Yeah, that's closer to what I meant.

#9 · 125w, 1d ago · · ·


Because Trixie...

#10 · 125w, 1d ago · · ·


#11 · 125w, 1d ago · · ·

Well, at least you didn't do the harlem shake.

#12 · 125w, 1d ago · · ·

Thank you all for including my little story. To answer Alex's comment, I do intend to eventually compose more Elements stories, but my Workerverse is taking priority.

All the best! :twilightsmile:

#13 · 125w, 20h ago · 1 · ·

yes flooturshie, kawaiiest pone

#14 · 125w, 15h ago · · ·


My exact quote upon her S1E1 appearance: *barely audible through laughter* "Oh my god, she's the moe one!"

#15 · 125w, 11h ago · 1 · ·

I was already kinda sold on the idea of Space Captain Pinkie Pie.  (Cake-based counterspells?  Brilliant!)  Then you mentioned public-key cryptography.  I am so there.

#16 · 125w, 6h ago · · ·


Sweet! I was hoping you had planned to expand upon that world. It's an interesting take on something we've all taken for granted at this point.

#17 · 125w, 2h ago · · ·

How do I get these site blog posts out of my notification stream? I tried blocking Wanderer D and it didn't work.

#18 · 124w, 6d ago · · ·


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#19 · 124w, 6d ago · 1 · ·


I hate Pinkie.

Even more than Fluttershy

You're gonna burn in pony hell for this, man. :flutterrage:

Oh, wait, they already made you clean the toilet with your toothbrush write the intro and outro thingies.

Not an adequate punishment, but hey, you're still going to pony hell. :pinkiecrazy:



#20 · 124w, 6d ago · · ·


Alex's 2nd favorite pony, behind Trixie obviously, is Diamond Tiara.

#21 · 124w, 6d ago · · ·


You say that like it's a bad thing...

#22 · 124w, 6d ago · · ·


You say that as if it isn't!

#23 · 124w, 6d ago · · ·


You say that as if I said that as if Pav said that it was!

#27 · 124w, 3d ago · · ·

I really like that this exists. It's always nice to see some thought on a story.

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