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lilinuyasha 7478

Joined August 2011
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    lilinuyasha's Stories (7)

    • The Problematic Patent
      A strange patent attempts to be published, but it's slightly...questionable.

      2,440 words · 1,255 views · 42 likes · 0 dislikes
    • Flutterheart
      Trey is an average band director in Ponyville. He's not looking for love, but it falls into his lap.
      46,788 words · 9,566 views · 445 likes · 30 dislikes
    • Sour Apples
      Everypony has to go through terrible ordeals at some point. How will Applejack handle it?
      2,503 words · 1,562 views · 41 likes · 1 dislikes
    • The Flutterheart Diaries
      Even after Trey and Fluttershy marry, some things are still unknown.
      65,463 words · 2,452 views · 183 likes · 23 dislikes
    • The Forgotten Battle of Equestria
      11,159 words · 797 views · 27 likes · 6 dislikes
    • Cowcolt Bebop
      4,329 words · 625 views · 18 likes · 3 dislikes
    • Legend of Rarity: One Pony Band of Time!
      8,835 words · 1,189 views · 23 likes · 6 dislikes
    Feb
    25th
    2012

    Flutterheart edit? · 6:35am

    I've been thinking about going back through Flutterheart and making some major edits to revamp the story and increase its value. However, since I tend not to think of my stories as "Perfect" or "Classic", like my fans seem to think it is, I'm going to ask you guys. Other than going through the document to make subtle changes like "Someone" to somepony or "Person" to "pony", I'm talking about paragraph edits, new paragraphs...yet, i feel like somehow messing with perfection could mess it up. I'll leave it up to you guys. What should I do?

    lilinuyasha · 7 views

    Comments ( 9 )

    #1 · 68w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I guess you could make minor edits, but other than that it's a good story.

    #2 · 68w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I'd suggest looking for grammar and spelling errors, of course, and if there are paragraphs that are extremely long that would work better split in half, then by all means do so.

    But, the story as a whole doesn't need revamping. Just some 'Spring cleaning'.

    #3 · 68w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Just minor edits please!                                                                                                                                                                 :pinkiehappy:

    #4 · 68w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Minor Edits! seriously, like you said, "Don't mess with perfection"!

    #5 · 68w, 3d ago · · ·
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    just check for grammer and spelling errors!

    #6 · 68w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Well, if you are going to edit it, follow these comments above me. Make only minor edits. Also look for grammar problems (if there is some:raritywink:). Also, yes the paragraphs can be a bit split up, they do seem to be a little to long, other than that, I have no other things to say. Story is still fantastic, by the way. :pinkiehappy:

    #7 · 68w, 3d ago · · ·
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    It's up to you, how you feel. For me it's the perfectly sweet shipping story now, but I won't deny any changes to better.

    #8 · 68w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Flutterheart was so good I started to cry while reading it at times. And I was in a perfectly good mood one second because I was reading  Flutterheart (:twilightsmile:) and then the next I was blinking back tears.

    #9 · 67w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Well, I'm going to be the odd man out and say that I would like to see an edit of Flutterheart.  I think it is fair to say you've improved as a writer from when you first started Flutterheart, and I would like to see what would be the result of such editing.  Granted, there will always be things that could be changed no matter how much you edit, but still, I'm curious to see what you would produce.

    That being said, the original version is just fine and still a favorite should you choose not to edit stuff here and there.  I personally would like to not see too many major plot points changes, just to keep the outline of the story the same.

    Anywho, I look forward to whatever you produce.

    ~Nocturne

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